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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
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0 posted 2001-02-06 09:58 AM


This is not a plea for sympathy, truly.  It's just that I'm reading a delightful book filled with delightful love, and I miss my own experience.  But at least I had it.


Broken Valentine
Virginia Salter

I’m reading of love that’s deep
enhanced with spoon-fashioned sleep
as into night hearts do creep
and all I do is weep
for my days of having done
have evolved to no more than none.

It would not be such pain for me
had I not had such ecstasy,
yet, now I’ve fully been set free
from the bonds that bring one glee
even though I’d not want to be
cast into this rolling sea.

But I truly must confess
I would take those hours of bless
when to my love I wholly pressed
and to which cannot regress
for the time is closed to me
as I live this melancholy plea.

© February  6,  2001

© Copyright 2001 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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1 posted 2001-02-06 06:17 PM


Virginia, this is sweet and heartfelt. We all deserve to have ongoing love. I wonder why it is so hard to have? This holiday can be a sad one when love is not with you. Nice work, expressing it for all of us lonely ones.
Sandra

Celeste
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2 posted 2001-02-06 06:23 PM


Beautifully written, Virginia.  I'm glad you posted it.  A reflection of thoughts.
Great to see you again!

To capture and live a moment is truly living


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3 posted 2001-02-07 08:50 PM


I apologize VAS. . . I had read this but not replied. . . but I will now send it back so that everyone can compare it with Silly Valentine. . .

this is equally as wonderful!!!



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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
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Oregon
4 posted 2001-02-08 01:00 AM


Thank you all for your wonderful comments. So happy you liked this piece.

I do have to admit, each time I read it, I am more convinced that I totally left out a line that I had thought when composing, but apparently didn't type.  I can't put a finger on what's missing, but it feels like something is.  It's like there's a line needed to explain something, not full out, but just enough to help the reader know what I really mean.  going to have to ponder it.  Yet, maybe it's just me.

Honeybee
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5 posted 2001-02-09 07:29 PM



Beautifully sad! I do relate!

Take care,
Melissa~

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