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Gothkitty
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0 posted 2001-02-06 12:03 PM


"Weeping Autumn Sky"

October flowers fall to earth
Ancient trees are bleeding,
Time is frail, as youth grows old
Fading into November morning.

Cold winds blow winter's herald
First snow falls as angels cry,
A dove circles in the cold night
With it's heart lonely like mine.

As the autumn sky is weeping
My soul joins it in crying,
Where the dove flies in my heart
You'll see the angel dying… (within)

Black roses fall to lay on earth
Like a babe to mother's breast,
Like this man who has lost his hope
Who has seen love sent to rest.

October leaves fall in the night
Amidst the angels' tears of snow
I, like the dove, cry out for death
To release me from this sorrow.

As the Autumn sky is weeping
My soul joins it in crying,
Where the dove flies in my heart
You'll see the angel dying.

And the angels weep, and not for me
But for the earth's loss of light and bliss.
And they will grant me the end of pain
Sending Death with her gentle kiss

© Copyright 2001 Gothkitty - All Rights Reserved
whiskey
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1 posted 2001-02-06 12:20 PM


Very nice I liked this, has great discription I will look forward to reading more of your work  


Julie

Gothkitty
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2 posted 2001-02-06 07:46 AM


Thank you whiskey for reading my work  


gk

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3 posted 2001-02-10 07:46 AM


wonderful piece...and way back in the blue pages...well worth to bump you up.

Charisma

ATelamon
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4 posted 2001-02-10 07:57 AM


This haunts in its voice detached. You have captured the feelings quite well, your yearning for passage is echoed by many at one or all times in their breathing.

Well done.
AT

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5 posted 2001-02-10 11:16 AM


GothKitty~
This is a hauntingly beautiful piece.
Tenderly poignant.
~*Marge*~


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pixiechild
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6 posted 2001-02-10 12:11 PM


this is such a beatiful piece...so deep. very good   keep it up.

pixiechild

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