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The me inside of you
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The me inside of you |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Posted With Janet Marie's approval - A sonnet developed from her recent "Traces" Post: The me inside of you, what I left behind The whisper in your heart, ghost of regret That trace of content, the mend in your mind The secret you keep deep memory inset Does the thought of me make your smile whole The love we’ve shared, is it held in your heart Did my footprint leave a stain on your soul Or my love bring peace? Did my love leave a mark When you cry am I reflected in your tears Am I inside you, a treasured memory Have I inspired the direction of your years Looking at our love do you feel destiny For these are all with me engraved in my heart I cherish our love, on me there’s your mark Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes. ~ Chinese Proverb ~ |
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Mendy Junior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 34 |
I'm not a great writer - not even a good one really but I couldn't help contrasting ths poem with the one I just posted - it seems a strange coincedence. I felt better reading it as I had just written mine if it is true that the world talks toomuch then let us all keep quiet and hear the eloquence of silence - Richard Ntiru |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mendy, "traces" seems to be the theme for the past few days....I'll read yours soon... Mr. Yeats, this is absolutely wonderful! But then, you have a fan here, and you know it! Thank you for sharing this with us! I know you won't mind my librarying it.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--This was beautifully done...Janet is such an inspiration, isn't she? But then, so are you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For these are all with me engraved in my heart I cherish our love, on me there’s your mark =============== This is lovely Bill ... I especially love the last summation lines... they perfectly captured what I was trying to convey in my poem. THANK YOU so much for this honor... thank you for finding your inspiration in my words... and this treat is made even sweeter being given as a sonnet... you make them look easy gifted poet sir. you have my poetic repsect and my envy  Tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I've found a love so strong The sun and the moon look on in jealousy ~VH~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Sir. . . a treasure on its own. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Yes and yes and yes again |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I am trying to think of new ways to say wonderful, beautiful, marvelous, and full of truth. I am failing, but this poem certainly succeeds in being all those things. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
I loved this. It touches so deeply on what I've had on my mind all day. Thank you! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ VERY nice. Don't ya' just love it when inspiration sneaks up and splashes new ink all over you ? Wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, this one left the traces of its splendor on my heart. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, love does leave its mark doesn't it?  ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Everyone (and especially Janet Marie) - I feel so guilty not replying to each of you individually - yet my available time on PC has become very limited - and I'd much rather use what little time I have to read and respond to your poems. Thank you all very much - And special thanks to Janet Marie for the beautiful inspiration. (any time you want to try a sonnet girl - I'd be quite pleased to assist in any way I can) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
yes I do like it allot...excellent as always my dear Charisma |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
beautifully said Bill Into mind sketched Into heart etched Hope |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
beautifully said Bill Into mind sketched Into heart etched Hope |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beautifully done sir. She does have a way of inspiring us and YOU have a way of capturing the reader in every work you share with us. Great read for sure. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Charosma - Hope - Mark - Thank you so much - I truly do appreciate your responses |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was resting quietly in my library... and it brought back many wonderful memories of a very wonderful poet... thank you, Janet Marie, for being such an inspiration to Mr. Yeats! |
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