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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 02-05-2001 11:44 AM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

Posted With Janet Marie's approval - A sonnet developed from her recent "Traces" Post:

The me inside of you,  what I left behind
The whisper in your heart, ghost of regret
That trace of content, the mend in your mind
The secret you keep deep memory inset

Does the thought of me make your smile whole
The love we’ve shared, is it held in your heart
Did my footprint leave a stain on your soul
Or my love bring peace? Did my love leave a mark

When you cry am I reflected in your tears
Am I inside you, a treasured memory
Have I inspired the direction of your years
Looking at our love do you feel destiny

For these are all with me engraved in my heart
I cherish our love, on me there’s your mark



Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes.

~ Chinese Proverb ~

© Copyright 2001 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
Mendy
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1 posted 02-05-2001 11:49 AM       View Profile for Mendy   Email Mendy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mendy's Home Page   View IP for Mendy

I'm not a great writer - not even a good one really but I couldn't help contrasting ths poem with the one I just posted - it seems a strange coincedence.

I felt better reading it as I had just written mine

if it is true that the world talks toomuch then let us all keep quiet and hear the eloquence of silence - Richard Ntiru
Sunshine
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2 posted 02-05-2001 11:52 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Mendy, "traces" seems to be the theme for the past few days....I'll read yours soon...

Mr. Yeats, this is absolutely wonderful!  But then, you have a fan here, and you know it!  Thank you for sharing this with us!

I know you won't mind my librarying it....
Martie
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3 posted 02-05-2001 11:56 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Bill--This was beautifully done...Janet is such an inspiration, isn't she?  But then, so are you.
Janet Marie
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4 posted 02-05-2001 12:33 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

For these are all with me engraved in my heart
I cherish our love, on me there’s your mark

===============

This is lovely Bill ...
I especially love the last summation lines...
they perfectly captured what I was trying to convey in my poem.
THANK YOU so much for this honor...
thank you for finding your inspiration in my words...
and this treat is made even sweeter being given as a sonnet...
you make them look easy gifted poet sir.
you have my poetic repsect and my envy  


Tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I've found a love so strong
The sun and the moon look on in jealousy
~VH~
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5 posted 02-05-2001 12:59 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Wonderful Sir. . . a treasure on its own. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.
Paula Finn
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Yes and yes and yes again
kcsgrandma
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7 posted 02-06-2001 12:58 AM       View Profile for kcsgrandma   Email kcsgrandma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit kcsgrandma's Home Page   View IP for kcsgrandma

I am trying to think of new ways to say wonderful, beautiful, marvelous, and full of truth.  I am failing, but this poem certainly succeeds in being all those things.  

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn
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8 posted 02-06-2001 01:48 AM       View Profile for Celeste   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Celeste

I loved this.   It touches so deeply on what I've had on my mind all day.   Thank you!


To capture and live a moment is truly living

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Wilfred~
VERY nice.
Don't ya' just love it when inspiration sneaks up
and splashes new ink all over you ?
Wonderful !
~*Marge*~


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Kethry
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10 posted 02-06-2001 08:25 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Wil,
this one left the traces of its splendor on my heart.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.


hoot_owl_rn
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Oh, love does leave its mark doesn't it?  

~ Ruth
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Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 02-06-2001 09:34 AM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

Everyone (and especially Janet Marie) -

I feel so guilty not replying to each of you individually -  yet my available time on PC has become very limited - and I'd much rather use what little time I have to read and respond to your poems.

Thank you all very much -

And special thanks to Janet Marie for the beautiful inspiration.
(any time you want to try a sonnet girl - I'd be quite pleased to assist in any way I can)
Charisma
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13 posted 02-06-2001 09:46 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

yes I do like it allot...excellent as always my dear

Charisma
HopeS
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14 posted 02-06-2001 10:14 AM       View Profile for HopeS   Email HopeS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HopeS's Home Page   View IP for HopeS

beautifully said Bill
Into mind sketched
Into heart etched
Hope
HopeS
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beautifully said Bill
Into mind sketched
Into heart etched
Hope
Mark Bohannan
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Beautifully done sir.  She does have a way of inspiring us and YOU have a way of capturing the reader in every work you share with us.  Great read for sure.

If you find yourself stranded in a storm
...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together
Wilfred Yeats
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17 posted 02-07-2001 10:29 AM       View Profile for Wilfred Yeats   Email Wilfred Yeats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wilfred Yeats's Home Page   View IP for Wilfred Yeats

Charosma - Hope - Mark -
Thank you so much - I truly do appreciate your responses
Sunshine
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18 posted 08-18-2005 04:41 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This was resting quietly
in my library...

and it brought back many
wonderful memories of a very
wonderful poet...

thank you, Janet Marie,
for being such an inspiration
to Mr. Yeats!
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