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Perhaps Someday . . .
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Perhaps Someday . . . |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Someday I will hopefully understand Why dreams were ripped from my hand As I sat there watching them die Hot tears streamed freely from my eyes There was nothing at all I could do At that moment my heart broke in two Pain ravaged my weary soul Blocking out forever my goal Nothing tangible left to grasp Fate had obliterated love’s clasp Sentencing me to a life alone Where once brilliant light had shone Never to be seen here again I doubt my heart could ever mend It suffered such bitter defeat As I sat frozen in my seat There were no words to say On that bitter January day The feelings I held deep inside For eternity shall they reside Reminding me of the reason I abhor this cursed season That tore my life apart Scarring forever my fragile heart I still feel the intensity of the pain That marked me with a blemishing stain Scorching through my warm blood Dragging my emotions through the mud Where they were left to die Under the blackest of skies Dreams that once made me see The woman I was meant to be What will happen to her No one can really be sure She was buried alive So she never had arrived Unable to realize the dream That was within her reach it seemed Cut off in her prime This was not her time Perhaps someday she’ll rise once more To stand timidly at love’s closed door Hoping this time to be given a chance To experience the art of romance Which she knew once long ago Before the sun left the wind to blow A wolf cries out mournfully As she hopes for all she’ll one day be Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 02-04-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LW, we know not why things happen the way that they do. . . they just do. . . and sometimes. . . they just don't happen the way that we want them to. . . So, we try again. . . and in the trying. . . we find who we really are. . . and what we're meant to be. . . Excellent poem. . .  --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 02-04-2001).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Someday you will arise....find your strength and faith again. Life isn't always what we expected from it.... you described your feelings very well ((warm hugs))) Charisma |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Lonewolf - this is an absolutely tender but sad writing, and I also have felt some of the things that you write. I know how you feel, from my experience, and I wish you the best. BC |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, dear, you penned this very well... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ah my friend LW...just remember the sun also rises tomorrow, and the day after, and the day after, ad infinitum...although the sky may be cloudy, the sun, regardless is there, just waiting for them to part. In the same way, love is also just beyond the pain, always waiting...waiting for the door to open again. So heal, my friend, and when you're ready...the passion will arise again. jwesley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Your poem is very sad and touching and Sven's words are full of hope and understanding...James |
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Jill Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 62Louisiana |
What you have written is very sad...though it is very hard, keep looking to tomorrow. Don't look for the reason why, no reason could ever be enough to saisfy the amount of pain you feel. Take care. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Not perhaps ... definitely ... and it will come sooner than you think, my dear. A poignant piece of longing - waiting to be realized. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
erase the word "helpless" and this poem will be fantastic. I know you don't need a critique, but get rid of that word!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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CD Member
since 2001-01-27
Posts 101 |
If what you describe is something that is tearing at you today, my feelings of consolation are with you. As Sven said, somethings just happen. That's when we realize how powerful the works of this world are compared to us. Excellent poem. It sure gave me a shiver. CD |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wow.. what a wonderful, yet sad poem. Perhaps someday everyone will know that love, and keep it too.. thanks for sharing. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven . . . Sometimes they just happen, but we are not given the chance to try again. So the opportunity to discover what could be is lost to us forever. That is life I guess. Thanks for your thoughts. Charisma . . . Thank you, my friend. Someday I hope I shall do just that. Bill . . . Sorry that you relate to this, but I am sure the feelings are temporary. Just getting some feelings out there. Sunshine . . . I appreciate that my friend. James . . . I know that somewhere beyond the pain lies happiness, but at times it seems so far away. Just have to remember it is there with each new sunrise. Thank you my friend. JamesMichael . . . Yes it is sad, but through dark we find the light. It's always there. Thanks. Jill . . . I thank you for the advice. I know there reasons will never be known, but healing is faster if we know why. Welcome to Passions, by the way!! Marge . . . I hope it does!! LOL. I know it will in time. Thanks for the reply. ~hugs~ back at ya!! Kathleen . . . Thanks and it is done.  CD . . . I always write my heart . . . good, bad, happy, sad. This is me. Thanks for the reply. Welcome to Passions!! Dawn . . . I hope to find I love that I can keep one day and share with someone special. You are welcome for sharing. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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