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Of Feelings I'm Free
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Of Feelings I'm Free |
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Jill Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 62Louisiana |
Step out of myself to try and understand me Don't know me, can't reach me Of feelings I'm free Devoid of all emotion except one called fear All dried up inside, can't even shed tears The need to escape, overpowering, so strong Go through the motions, pretend to belong Step back into myself, confused of my destiny One dead soul am I, of feelings I'm free |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
One dead soul am I, of feelings I'm free ================== I must disagree ... this bittersweet emotion filled poem with lovely cadence speaks otherwise  well written and expressed new poetess Welcome to Passions Jill .. so nice to have you here. take care jm If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Jill Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 62Louisiana |
Janet - Thanks for the welcome and the reply. Very much appreciated. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Jill, you have written some soul-searching words. But they are so very well written and haunting. I think this is very deep and you have written them so very well. A very nice poem and hope to see many more from you. Welcome to Passions. Hugs, ME |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family, I hope you enjoy your stay. Tis a sad but lovely poem you've chosen as your first post and I look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special welcome.  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Welcome! I greatly enjoyed this one. " I have seen without perceiving I have been another man Let me pierce the realm of glamour So I know just what I am"....Dweller on the Threshold, |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jil love, this is outstanding, a wonderful debut, absolutely fabulous piece. And I love it, I shall put this in my library. When you are the shining star here, that destiny I believe, has ordained, I shall say I still have her first poem. Welcome again, may you always shine brightly Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
JILL..i know this feeling..its a very lonely place... i hope you find your feelings soon.. welcome to passions...pull up a chair and stay a spell hugs, g "i know its kinda late i hope i didnt wake you but theres somethin i just gotta say-- i knew you'd understand..." jcroce |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Devoid of all emotion except one called fear" First, welcome to the forum, and your poem says an awful lot. This line made me think that a friend mentioned to me recently, that fear is "needed" use it for what it's meant for - protect yourself and defend yourself. This is war!!! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Devoid of all emotion except one called fear" First, welcome to the forum, and your poem says an awful lot. This line made me think that a friend mentioned to me recently, that fear is "needed" use it for what it's meant for - protect yourself and defend yourself. This is war!!! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I can't say about feelings, although your writing suggests otherwise, but you certainly are not free of thought, or of the ability to use words well. Welcome to Passions. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to the family ...loved and enjoyed reading it. Charisma |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You can't be devoid of feelings and write poetry like this! Corinne |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Jill Your words touched me. Very sad and moving and beautiful. Ariana |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Jill - this is absolutely lovely but sad. I look forward to reading more of your writings. BC |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jill~ Welcome This is fantastic.......I remember these feelings.........gripping..........excellent first post -SEA |
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Jill Member
since 2001-02-02
Posts 62Louisiana |
Mother Earth - Thank you....these words were written from the soul.....I too look forward to reading yours. Poet Divine - Thanks for the welcome....I am sure I will enjoy my stay here after some of the great reads. Eagle One - I'm glad you enjoyed it. Marsha - What w wonderful welcome you gave me....thank you so much. I have read several of yours and I must say you are outstanding. Thanks again. dgvarner - They will show up sooner or later....always do. Kathlenn Thanks for the welcome...your words are so true. kcsgrandma / Charisma - Thanks for the welcome....glad you enjoyed this one. Corinne/Ariana - Thanks for the welcome and the reply.....I look forward to reading lots of yours as well. Jill |
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