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.....a matter of belief.....
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.....a matter of belief..... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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a matter of belief "you… are all I want," he said and she believed, oh she believed until the night she walked the floors she believed until he came in through that door she believed until she said "tell me the truth," and with the slamming of the door she believed in never more… time and time went on and passed and she gave in again to a thought of believing in together and the idea that she could believe sprang forth again, ~ reaching, reaching ~ for the light and she believed in the light but more this time she believed that she wouldn't crumble if there should be another reason to not believe and as the shattering took place around her feet once more, she didn't criticize herself (as that had already been done) but instead she began to believe in herself and in the thought that He created her for a reason and for a season and as a gift for someone so she believed in that… that she would be a gift… to someone she hasn't been totally unwrapped yet… but someday… one day… someone will see a package ~ who knows what color the wrapping will be… ~ a shroud of black to mourn? a dress of responsibility worn? independence wrapped in green? perhaps in the white of light… and there will be a slender ribbon that with a tug or a pull of love will let loose the gifts within for everyone is someone's gift and no one should ever look the horse in the mouth but be grateful for the wrappings of the package if it comes into your hands… and then share in a belief… that dreams can come true… and that you can get what you wish for… so here is the key… believe… 02.01.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
To be a gift and received with care and respect is a gift in itself!!! Thank you for this. "I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
she hasn't been totally unwrapped yet… but someday… one day… someone will see a package ~ who knows what color the wrapping will be… ~ a shroud of black to mourn? a dress of responsibility worn? independence wrapped in green? perhaps in the white of light… and there will be a slender ribbon that with a tug or a pull of love will let loose the gifts within for everyone is someone's gift ====================  need I say more?  If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kathleen, my friend....we know, don't we? JanetMarie, Queen of Response, I love Norman Rockwell...you have touched my heart....thank you for this one... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Belief is indeed the key, Sunshine. Your words are magical.... |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Sunshine, this is so lovely - poignancy mixed with such hopeful faith. Thank you! Lary |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
the rhythm is superb. it reads and flows... it has a life its own. faith is half the battle. You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very interesting piece, Sunshine. The rhythm and flow are superb and it has a sense of poignancy. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: *sigh* sad... but... so much truth in all of this that it's not sad but it is but it isn't, if that makes sense... i just quoted those lines because they hit me hard.... you're an awesome writer, ms. K.... loveyoumuch |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
sharon... watch out!! you're starting to sound like me! that's all i could type for 2 days... "wow"... but this one is very well deserved... a BIG WOW here, too ..... excellent writing.... i had to come back and re-read it, karilea... it's a hard hitting poem with much substance.... thank you! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
My eyes glanced up and down at this wondrous peice of art. Comparing this woman to a gift is very intriguing. You made me really think hard about this. I thank you for your expertise. -Jeremy Raulinaitis "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
to take a phrase from DP: "you're an awesome writer, ms. K" (and I was hit hard too) - some transitions in some relationships are irreversable - and it is sad that that is too often true |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ I can relate.........only I found the one to open and find my gifts...........( he's in the other room snoring away :> ) No surprise this found it's way to my heart.  -SEA |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for your kind responses....in the past few months I've tried to delve into various poetic forms.... I think for a while I'll stick with rambling free verse with a touch of lesson attached... again....many smiles at the many responses....thank you all.... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is excellent. . . it always starts with the key. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--this poem feels so right to me...the message, the realness of it...wonderfully done! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you both....very much! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A most beautiful poem...it speaks to my heart and agrees with my heart...James |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
quote: Oh, *sigh*... Karilea, read this through and felt myself gripping, then warming, and felt this little strike right throuhg my center 'bout a dozen times. As one who is in the process of being unwrapped, I have to say I understand this in it's need, by reflection, and in it's hope, finally, by understanding. Beautiful, lady, thank you! ~Beth |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Oh, Karilea, you have no idea how this poem so perfectly reflects exactly where I am at this moment in time...it's as if our poetic hearts had a momentary conjoining ...His Will be done! We are a precious gift not to be given lightly but only to one who belives as we do... Love, Ellie  A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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