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jellybeans
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0 posted 2001-02-01 01:02 PM


Tell me please
are you finally just going to disappear?
I can't seem to stop your memory
from softly sifting through the cracks.
Though I believe an ill wind must keep you
from ever hitting the ground,
'cause I look and I can't find you anywhere
you are just gone.

Help me please
find the friend I thought I
would always have.
Help me find the traces
of the smiles we shared,
of the teasing heat we
had so much fun creating,
the traces of deep hurts that together
we cleansed
or tried to at least.

Tell me please how could I
have been just a passing hello
that you no longer
have need to say?
I don't understand how you manage to linger
and I don't.
Before your sifting ceases,
can't you tell me, please?



[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 02-01-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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1 posted 2001-02-01 02:08 PM


This is very sad, very painful to read.

"I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis



laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
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2 posted 2001-02-01 02:51 PM


This is such a gentle hurting plea...and I love the way you've woven the trail...from
"softly sifting through the cracks" to
"Before your sifting ceases
can't you tell me please?"
A perfect finish to a great poem!
Lary

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3 posted 2001-02-01 03:21 PM


Tell me please how could I
have been just a passing hello
that you no longer
have need to say?
I don't understand how you manage to linger
and I don't.
Before your sifting ceases,
can't you tell me, please?

What a poignant plea... I think I wail the same words at the wall... but you give it a softness and gentleness that makes it all the more painful. Wonderful poem!

jellybeans
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4 posted 2001-02-01 04:00 PM


kathleen, I am trying to write out the sadness instead of letting it make me stale, thank you for your comments

lary, coming from someone who writes as well as you do, your comments make me smile, thank you  

suthern, soft or loud, wailing is still wailing, someday it will be our laughter that bounces off the walls instead  

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