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Master
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Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-01-31 04:03 PM



Before this perfect square alone I stand
and I reflect upon its very meaning,--
it’s not a box.... an outlet!-- I demand
to be let out. The stars outside are gleaming.
The darkness makes it seem as if they blend
together with the window, thus deceiving
the mind into thinking that a hand
could touch the glowing stars and this believing,

the mind leaves a handprint on the glass.
The window is our link to the outside,--
it shows the eye the greenery of grass,
unlike the wall, which doesn’t yield to sight.
The window lets the sultry sunlight pass,--
without windows there would be no light,
and hence, no warmth. Each window has
four corners and four sides (each side

is tangent to two corners), which then form
four angles that are measured in degrees.
These measures are important when a storm,
with raging winds picks up the small debris,--
they make the windows strong and keep you warm,
and windows block the branches of the trees
that bend with raging winds out of the norm.
Thus windows are the messengers of peace.

The windows do of course require care,--
you won’t see anything unless the view is clear,--
but use a sponge to swipe away the glare
of golden dust and colors will appear
and then, relax and sit back in your chair
and let the breeze be music to your ear.
An opened window serves to let fresh air
refresh the room. At any time of year,

the windows can be opened in the day
to let the sunshine spill its rays of gold.
The sunlight will submerge the room and stay
as though a guest who’s welcomed here uncalled.
And when the snow makes all the earth seem gray,
and when the breeze is simply just too cold,
and when you feel the need to hide away,
the curtains can be drawn to blind the world.

At night, they are like mirrors, they reflect
our every move and thus it often seems
when we are doubled by this strange effect
that we are living in the land of dreams,
where even parallels will somehow intersect,
where star-crossed lovers find the hidden seams.
The eye-- the star, two points now connect
and hands, again reach up for silver beams.


Check out my poetry here:


http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master


© Copyright 2001 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-02-01 02:11 AM


Master~
I like the depth of this piece.

'The stars outside are gleaming.
The darkness makes it seem as if they blend
together with the window, thus deceiving
the mind into thinking that a hand
could touch the glowing stars and this believing,
the mind leaves a handprint on the glass.'


I love windows and enjoyed looking in and out of yours.
Whoops ... does that make me a Peeping Marge ?  
~*Marge*~

~*Marge*~




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Master
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2 posted 2001-02-01 07:39 AM


Thank you Peeping Marge! Happy to share my view with you.
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-02-06 11:49 PM


A blatant bump !
Come on folks ... this is good poetry !

Master~
I've also checked out your web page link -
talent ! !


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Marsha
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4 posted 2001-02-07 08:00 AM


Master, Margie girl is right this is outstanding poetry. Absolutely first class work.
You can write you really can.
Excellant stuff
Take care love
                    Mushy
And Margie, you are a doll thanks for the tip.


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



SEA
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with you
5 posted 2001-02-07 01:03 PM


Ok.......I admit it.......I've never quite looked at my windows like this before........but now I know I won't be able to look at them without remembering this wonderful poem    -SEA
lucky
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6 posted 2001-02-07 01:46 PM


Master,

I must say it is good... very good in fact. However, have you ever been to Seattle..? It doesn't really matter the time of year you can be sure to find gray and wet. If the Sun comes out they say don't worry, wait 5 minutes and it will be gone. I also like your mathematics... It brings back a bit of good 'ol school daze.

dale

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7 posted 2001-02-07 07:00 PM


the windows can be opened in the day
to let the sunshine spill its rays of gold.
The sunlight will submerge the room and stay
as though a guest who’s welcomed here uncalled.
And when the snow makes all the earth seem gray,
and when the breeze is simply just too cold,
and when you feel the need to hide away,
the curtains can be drawn to blind the world.

At night, they are like mirrors, they reflect
our every move and thus it often seems
when we are doubled by this strange effect
that we are living in the land of dreams,
where even parallels will somehow intersect,
where star-crossed lovers find the hidden seams.
The eye-- the star, two points now connect
and hands, again reach up for silver beams.
======================

very very cool write..very unique perspective.
excellent rhyme flow and cadence...
excellent imagery and metaphor
I loved the concept of this.. and the last verses wisdom ...
very well done poet sir ...

Tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I've found a love so strong
The sun and the moon look on in jealousy
~VH~

Cerenity
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Escondido-California
8 posted 2001-02-07 08:08 PM


Hi Master,

Wonderful. I love the preception of the walls, this is very deep in meaning, much enjoyed, I shall now go look out the window at the inpending storm, oop's to late just started raining, and last week we had 80 degrees weather go figure  

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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9 posted 2001-02-07 08:45 PM


I love a blatant bump!!!  

Especially when it's got poetry this good. . .

Superb Master. . . excellent. . .

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2001-02-08 10:53 PM


At night, they are like mirrors, they reflect
our every move and thus it often seems
when we are doubled by this strange effect
that we are living in the land of dreams,
where even parallels will somehow intersect,
where star-crossed lovers find the hidden seams.
The eye-- the star, two points now connect
and hands, again reach up for silver beams.
===================

WOW should just about cover the megar part of praise for this piece and the rest of the praise for this masterpiece will have to await NEW words to do it justice.  This is one of the best poems I have read in a long time or at all for that matter.  The depth and the vision in this piece is totally awesome.  I am saving to my library to enjoy this one many more times.  Superb piece of poetry.

Martie
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11 posted 2001-02-09 11:28 PM


Master--this is a wonderful piece of poetry..so perfectly done that it flowed like cream...in fact, I think I need to go wash my windows...I've been missing something.
Master
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Boston, MA
12 posted 2001-02-10 12:27 PM


Wow, I didn't know that this one came back from the dead... (thanks Marge!) This would have to be one my favorites and I'm happy that you all liked it also.
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