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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-01-31 02:30 PM


Loose ends

somewhere
I don't know where
is a ball of string
you may not recognize it
but
it's still the same thing
yes,  lost it's shape
tangled in
things you can't escape
it is a bumpy ball
how could it not be?
with the knots and all
so, if it's found
may not look round
please
if you have it
keep it nicely bound
for it's full of many things
all those END-betweens

some are mine
some are yours
everyone's are there
some put there carelessly
some are tightly wound
been noticing lately
I need to add some too
so easily done
although
not much fun
with a little follow through
would you look
to see if you have it?
I know one of you do
give me a call
I'll come get the ball
and later
pass it back to you

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[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 01-31-2001).]

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bslicker
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1 posted 2001-01-31 02:33 PM


WOWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!

jsom


Krawdad
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2 posted 2001-01-31 04:00 PM


Those cotton-pickin loose ends!  Hey, neat idea for a write.  A ball of string . . a ball of poems.  One more reason we write.
Enjoyed this, slick.

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3 posted 2001-01-31 06:18 PM


Great writing about loose ends in life.
bernie< !signature-->

Bernie Slicker



[This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 01-31-2001).]

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
4 posted 2001-01-31 09:15 PM


just...........thank you
kraw........so pleased you liked
Bern.....thank you
         yall come back now ya hear? lol  helen

spiked
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5 posted 2001-01-31 09:17 PM


You put a wonderful spin on this one Helen. Also artistic.
Rich

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6 posted 2001-01-31 10:54 PM


I read this earlier...? and...must say, I think the edit really tied up the loose ends nicely (wink)
Agent696_DS
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7 posted 2001-01-31 11:01 PM


Thats really nice i like all the different thoughts that came to mind after reading it.
great job

Agent696_DS
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8 posted 2001-01-31 11:01 PM


Thats really nice i like all the different thoughts that came to mind after reading it.
great job

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9 posted 2001-02-01 01:28 AM


This is great.....love the way you presented it.......makes me think of old friends....... -SEA
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