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seraphin
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0 posted 2001-01-31 09:33 AM


There beneath a gentle moon,
silence broken
by the croon,
of a mother rocking,
babe at her breast.
alone in the night,
the world at rest.
And there is peace.

There beneath a languid sky,
cotton clouds,
cascade by.
And willow trees bend,
in awkward stance,
a green gazebo
made for romance
If I should find it.

There beneath ribbons of rain,
that break from sky,
easing her pain,
and quelling the motion
of my day,
Be still for a bit,
drenched in the spray
of heavens tears.

Here upon a fragrant lawn,
sitting alone,
for now he is gone.
And all the world
is keener
to see,
for there is nothing left,
but my memory,
and from today on,
it will be my lover.


© Copyright 2001 Sandra McDonald - All Rights Reserved
inot2B
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since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205
Arkansas
1 posted 2001-01-31 09:48 AM


Nature has that ability to fill the space for your heart to take a break. Your words are very refreshing.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-01-31 09:49 AM


There beneath a languid sky,
cotton clouds,
cascade by.
And willow trees bend,
in awkward stance,
a green gazebo
made for romance
If I should find it.

There beneath ribbons of rain,
that break from sky,
easing her pain,
and quelling the motion
of my day,
Be still for a bit,
drenched in the spray
of heavens tears.
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you have some very cool imagery in this lovely bittersweet piece ...
the rhyme flow added to its pleasure of read
well done seraphin, nice to see your work here again.
take care
jm

If my slight Muse do please these curious days ...
The pain be mine ...
but thine shall be the praise.

~Shakespeare~


vandana
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3 posted 2001-01-31 11:09 AM


enjoy the read
Tennessee Angel
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since 2000-06-03
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Tennessee
4 posted 2001-01-31 12:26 PM


This was lovely!  I truly enjoyed reading this piece.
seraphin
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since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004
Michigan
5 posted 2001-01-31 05:12 PM


Thank you all for the time you took to read this. I don't post as often as I would like. I've kind of hit a wall, and am trying to climb over it.
Any critism is surely welcome. Thanks again.

Sandi

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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6 posted 2001-01-31 06:41 PM


I would encourage you to write more nature poems, I believe you have a talent for them!

Kathleen



Sven
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7 posted 2001-01-31 06:58 PM


I must concur with Irish Rose. . . you do have a talent for seeing things in nature. . . like this poem. . .

Wonderful seraphin. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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