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Snow Sweet to Spring............................Sonnet IV
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Snow Sweet to Spring............................Sonnet IV |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Snow Sweet to Spring [Sonnet IV] snow flake, whence be thee cast, oh see, come see! crystal blanket to fit this grass, to welcome Spring haven earth in quilt, oh yes, this so cold a night and in shimmering morning gilt, a golden crystal light large, large lambent lace, round and round then grace this smile, this laugh, this figure and oh, joyful face and pelt me not in crystalline but in soft, sweet serene would I then, in dreamlike state, be earth's snow queen cling then I to yon tree, in glittering frost white, do drape to last of leaves, I melt, do I, till melted tear escapes round and round in prudent fall do I, to crepe all scenery till then in glow of orb do I, grace all verdant greenery for every season, comes a reason, for this winter white to glace a pool, to grow a green, in a summer light 01.29.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ I have no idea how to write like this......I love it! So pretty and flowing..........the photo kinda looks like where I live  -SEA |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, neither did I know how...until I read, and read, and read some more....and the photo? it sort of looks like where I live, too...thank you!... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
haven earth in quilt, oh yes, this so cold a night and in shimmering morning gilt, a golden crystal light large, large lambent lace, round and round then grace this smile, this laugh, this figure and oh, joyful face and pelt me not in crystalline but in soft, sweet serene would I then, in dreamlike state, be earth's snow queen cling then I to yon tree, in glittering frost white, do drape to last of leaves, I melt, do I, till melted tear escapes round and round in prudent fall do I, to crepe all scenery till then in glow of orb do I, grace all verdant greenery ================ so whats up...ya got a sonnet tree in your back yard...pick a peck?  your cranking these out like theyre easy dear poetess making me muse verdant in her greenery of envy... excellent imagery and vocab here Oh SUN OF SONNETS way cool If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Very nice, Sunshine. And timely too, we've just had icy rain and snow. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
great pic = great poem - wish I were that tree ~G~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JM....look at you! Giving me new names to contend with....a tree? Do I have a tree from which to pick poetic pieces? Tommyrot! If I had a tree from which to pick, it'd be a money tree!...LOL...thank you little one... Krawdad....I'm timely, if nothing else!...LOL...thanks for reading... Mr. Yeats! You want to be a cold tree in December? You sure about that? LOL...thank you {~,^} |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sunshine, a very beautious write. Love the concept... and that pic reminds me of my little piece of property in the woods of mid northern Ontario. Its very thick with snow right now and my little cabin is covered too.  Parker |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Sunshine, this sings so beautifully - it is truly a symphony, and touches all our senses. I am overwhelmed by the depth of the poetry on this site...I stopped by last June for just a moment - before my life upheaved. It has circled around again, for a period of calmness and I hope, rejuvenation. I am looking forward to getting acquainted! Lary |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, you do sonnets like they are easy peasy, and I know they're not. Well, not to me they're not. This is an absolutely beautiful piece and I'm not saying I wish I'd writen this because I couldn't love. It would be like me saying I wish I could walk on water, no point in wishing for the moon dear heart. I shall just enjoy the beauty and tell you how wonderful it is. Fantastic love, an absolute gem Take care as always love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Parker, Laryalee, Marsha...thank you...but today I learned that this is not a true sonnet...so we will call it a poem...and I will work on crafting a true sonnet...down the line... [but I still like the words...LOL] [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 01-30-2001).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Its still a beautiful write. I'm sure you could do some minor changes for it to fit in with the rules and still retain this. Those damn sonnet rules. Rules...we don't need no stinking rules. Parker. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
And he said "Beautiful." Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Parker, Interloper, you are both very kind....thank you so much... |
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