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in silent misery |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I think my heart is dying and my pen it writes in rust. my soul too old, it has decayed and blown away like dust I'm losing my ability to take a hand in trust. I tire of feeding dogs that bite to save myself a bit of crust... I'm not strong as you might think I'm just a little girl and all I want? to clap and sing, with my pretty skirt in whirl... and oh I would, I'd dance for you, a ribbon dance of swirl and try to be your everything your universe, unfurled a scroll of carpet for your feet, and at the end, I'd curtsey sweet, await in silent misery, in prayer the king might notice me. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
"I'm not strong as you might think I'm just a little girl and all I want? to clap and sing, with my pretty skirt in whirl..." Excellent work! I do like this one very much. " I have seen without perceiving I have been another man Let me pierce the realm of glamour So I know just what I am"....Dweller on the Threshold, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, I think my heart is dying and my pen it writes in rust. my soul too old, it has decayed and blown away like dust Beautiful poetry. *L* Sy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
he hasn't noticed you yet? awww c'mon! *wink*....... awesome write serene one.... lucy's dancin' withya! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity-- Don't keep misery silent. You deserve better than anyone who doesn't scroll out the carpet for you. take care, Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
he should notice you. . . you're the Queen. . .  excellent writing my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, I really enjoyed reading this poem you write... It's a keeper4me sweetie Thank you ~coco~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
serenity, such a poignant write.This touched my heart especially this. "I think my heart is dying and my pen it writes in rust. my soul too old, it has decayed and blown away like dust I'm losing my ability to take a hand in trust. I tire of feeding dogs that bite to save myself a bit of crust..." Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Girl girl girl you reading my mind with this one aint ya? Good stuff babe |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
am blown away by your work, sigh.....whew...again i say you write my heart lady, and far better than i ever could |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I think my heart is dying and my pen it writes in rust. my soul too old, it has decayed and blown away like dust I'm losing my ability to take a hand in trust. I tire of feeding dogs that bite to save myself a bit of crust... ================== *sigh* ... I know me sweet ... I know ... me thinks our wings are tired baby ... BUT trust me ... nothing that comes from your pen is rust!!! hugs in the winds blowing south me twin me loves ya me If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh serenity, I relate so deeply to your words. Very well expressed and so sorrowful. You have a great way with imagery and phrases that makes the reader share your emotions with you as if they were their own. Rust could never flow from your pen, only magic. I truly mean that too ~Hugs~Take care, Melissa~ |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
I loved it! very nice! ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
A most excellent piece of writing, I was moved by your description of "the little girl".. very good read. Thank you. KateBlessings Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...still yet another I'd forgotten! I want to thank you all, words just don't come near to expressing the gratitude! SMOOCHIES TO THE FORUM!!!! |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. |
Wow! Very impressive, I think I should look for more of your stuff here... D-mon |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
I like this, very well done. If he does not notice there are better fish in the sea. Red |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I think my heart is dying and my pen it writes in rust. my soul too old, it has decayed and blown away like dust and oh I would, I'd dance for you, a ribbon dance of swirl and try to be your everything your universe, unfurled You're talking to me hon! excellent writing Sista! loved it Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I want this in my library |
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