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A Super Sunday................#6000
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A Super Sunday................#6000 |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Super Sunday Snow has captured the mountains and down the canyons it breaths into the empty city streets around the cement and bricks of Sunday at three The sky is a dull gray and from the house of stone across the street with door open I hear loud shouts and cheers that echo around the branches of the naked trees I race across the lawn and throw myself down hands gripping the legs of my startled husband trying to get into the super bowl mood but the lawn streaks my light blue jeans green and he falls with a loud thud into the rose bush and the mood is not good I look back across the street as loud curses flip across the parked pick up trucks and bounce across the street as I sit on the damp ground with my moaning man who is looking at me now with a look that feels like he caught whatever had been thrown This seems like a good thing to do to sit here as the afternoon breathes that cool air and listen to the human sounds that start a chaos of dogs barking down the alley and across the street into the village Listen I say to his almost smile the one that is playing now as I take his hand and pull him toward me as we both sit perfectly still while through the neighbor’s window on a giant screen the blurred game is played |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Let me be the first to say wonderful. Love the way you write. *L* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Sounds like poor Taylor's been tackled by the cutest little cheerleader on the team ! How fun ! Now fix him some hot buttered popcorn and cheer his team on !  Loved the fun, my friend. AND ..... CONGRATULATIONS on the milestone ! ALL QUALITY ! Love ya', sis ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, wow your way with words is unbelievable, the images you conjure is amazing. and I can just see you racing toward your man gripping his legs and knocking him into the rose bush hehe GO Martie! I enjoyed it very much dear oh and CONGRATULATIONS on post 6000 hugs Maree |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Heck you even write so a person CAN smell the grass stains! Well done on both the poem, AND on the 6000th mark! Good job my friend! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wonderful poem Martie, like Dark Angel I loved the images....and congratulations on the 6000!  Just see how virtue repays you, you turn and someone betrays you Betray him first, and the game's reversed... -from The Scarlet Pimpernel |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
A Super Sunday it is indeed. . . Wonderful my friend. . . and Congratulations!!! -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Martie...congrats on 6000!!! LOL at my house it would be ME getting tackled...I LOVE football |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This was well-written but I'm such a wuss, all I'm thinking of is the pain from the fall. Ouch!!!*** |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie what a wonderful and enjoyable way to bring in your 6000th! I really enjoyed this (as usual) well written poem by you....take care ethome |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
great poem - and congrats on 6000 - someday I may care who's playing football on TV - till then _ I'll keep my eyes on the yard - looks like better fun ~S~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Friends...thank you all for the wonderful replies to this very silly post...my muse was busy watching the game I think...Hugs! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
NOT SILLY ... way cool ... congrats on your 6000th post sweet poet thanks for the many sweet replies to my work that make up some of those 6000th.. and this poem was adorable like the poet who wrote it If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Congratulation my friend with your 6000th...and what a wonderful write...loved reading it....hope to see many more. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Congratulations on 6000, Martie!! Well, at last, I see that football is good for something.....inspiring Martie to write poetry!! Very cute!!Denise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Silly???????????!!!!!!! Just try tackling this cowboy once and see how silly it is. Knowiing you, I can see this whole scene really happening and that is why I love having you as a friend. That and the fact that I get to read so much of your Superb poetry. CONGRATS ON YOUR MILESTONE my friend. Now let's see you tackle the next one thousand with some more of your beautiful and 3 dimensional words. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--You are the adorable one! Charisma--thank you so much for the friendship and the hug. Denise--You're right about the footfall...too cute. Mark--I made the whole thing up about the tackle...but the rest was true...thanks for being such a good friend. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Martie, Congratulations on your 60th hundred. Well done. I really enjoyed this beautiful piece. Cheers. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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