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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song

0 posted 2001-01-28 02:54 AM


                              When Did I Know


When did I know?

When I realized that with just a thought
In you I have found ... all I have sought

Your touch ...
                          just as gentle as the breath of a child
Your reach ...
                         more than the span of two hearts in time
Your charm ...
                        filled with the passion of heaven gone wild
Your words ...
                       ringing as silent as a cathedral's chime

When did it show?

When once again I opened my eyes to see
The blessing of you ... you bestowed on me

In whispers ...
                      etching your words in the songs you sing
In tears ...
                     cleansing your doubt to make room for two
In fears ...
                    abandoned as you stretched out your wings
In times ...
                   when I awoke smiling with the taste of you

How will it grow?

Where will this road take us when we start
I am not sure ... but you will have my heart

Slowly ...
                  as we learn to dance on the winds of song

Firmly ...
                with trust brighter than a star with a view

Softly ...
               searching petals of promise growing strong

Quietly ...
              echoing shouts of freedom in "I love you"


When did I know?
When I realized that I wasn't writing for you!

Mark Christopher


  Waiting for you is the easiest pain I have ever suffered






[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-28-2001).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-01-28 03:10 AM


MarkB~
This is just soooooo beautiful.
The thoughts wrapped up in such a lovely format ...
Wonderfully done, sweet poet.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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JamesMichael
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2 posted 2001-01-28 04:10 AM


Wonderful poem...James
KokoStewartKoomoa
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3 posted 2001-01-28 04:17 AM


This is very poignant and emoyionally touching... wonderful work of art

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko



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4 posted 2001-01-28 04:52 AM


beautiful poem Mark.

Where will this road take us when we start
I am not sure ... but you will have my heart"

I liked this one, thanks, AP


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5 posted 2001-01-28 06:35 AM


Mark my friend, this is indeed one beautiful piece from you as always. Really excellant writing and displaying beauty. Absolutely fabulous, I really loved the images in this one, soft but definitely there.
Really wonderful work
Take care
                    Mushy
                      


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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6 posted 2001-01-28 07:10 AM


...and he brands the sands of time again, laying down his MB as softly as a breath of breeze...

well done, Cowboy...

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7 posted 2001-01-28 09:50 AM


"Your touch ...
    just as gentle as the breath of a child
Your reach ...
    more than the span of two hearts in time"

"In tears ...
    cleansing your doubt to make room for two
In fears ...
    abandoned as you stretched out your wings"

What a beautiful read from you this morning! Such a variation in style, and it works beautifully for you Mark. Wonderful expression, and lovely wording ... "Waiting for you is the easiest pain I have ever suffered" ... excellent!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-01-28 09:56 AM


oh Mark these is such a lovely piece and like the form allot....its always a suprise to find your words of art.

love it my friend.

((hugs))
Charisma

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9 posted 2001-01-28 10:27 AM




When I realized that with just a thought
In you I have found ... all I have sought

Your touch ...
                          just as gentle as the breath of a child
Your reach ...
                         more than the span of two hearts in time

Your words ...
                       ringing as silent as a cathedral's chime

When once again I opened my eyes to see
The blessing of you ... you bestowed on me

In tears ...
                     cleansing your doubt to make room for two
In fears ...
                    abandoned as you stretched out your wings

Where will this road take us when we start
I am not sure ... but you will have my heart

Slowly ...
                  as we learn to dance on the winds of song

Firmly ...
                with trust brighter than a star with a view

Softly ...
               searching petals of promise growing strong

Quietly ...
              echoing shouts of freedom in "I love you"
======================

So ... my sweet poet of surprises ...
you KNOW Im smiling like the cheshire cat here ..right?
you also KNOW I LOVE seeing you reach and stretch like this...
trying new things...playing with your poetry..
(especially after last nights conversation)
(as always, your timing is perfect)            
and you KNOW I am totally digging the format and presentation here ...
it is the PERFECT way to display these...
beautiful, touching, lines of promise, anticipation,and patience of the heart.
(me thinks she is a lucky lady to know such patience and devotion)
very very cool write MC ...
shows your versatility as a poet ...
shows your heart as a gift of time...
(shows that a few well placed (...) make for a GROOVYof a poem!!)
hey..you knew that was coming, right            
love this one ... in case you couldnt tell LOL
and love the new sig btw too            
So, wanna talk about the next poetic request I have ...           (you know) ...
or do ya got some more surprises ....
yeah....I KNOW            
later baby...love ya
me

PS..dont ask me whats up with the colors...I wanted groovy in red...and then back to blue..LOL
hey..YOU taught me...YOU fix it  LOL
it aint easy being lefthanded baby    

< !signature-->

"she calls me baby ...
she calls everybody baaaaby".
~jc mellencamp~          





[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 01-28-2001).]

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10 posted 2001-01-28 11:13 AM


What a beautiful poem! *S* Love is all of that and more... whether the realization hits you like a baseball bat or sneaks up on you. *S* Well done!
Aimster
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11 posted 2001-01-28 11:54 AM


Mark~

this is soooo beautiful!! words can't
express how this touched my heart. the
love in your heart shows brilliantly
throughout this! great write, very
touching!

take care,
Amy  


"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart and can sing it back to you when you have forgotten
the words."


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12 posted 2001-01-28 12:01 PM


Ill add this to my favorite list ..love this one Mark..

                 ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



VAS
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13 posted 2001-01-28 12:30 PM


Superb, Mark!  Absolutely wonderful, and the line at the end..."When I realized I wasn't writing for you"

that is absolutely it, isn't it!  We may write to someone, we may write to be read, but really, above all we write for ourselves...our obsession to write.

Well done!!!

kcsgrandma
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14 posted 2001-01-28 01:35 PM


Mark, you don't need me to tell you what a beautiful poem this is, or how you make your readers feel every line, but it is and you do.  You inspire me to think about how I would answer the same questions.  In other words, you succeed on every level here.  Wonderful read!

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

ethome
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15 posted 2001-01-28 02:45 PM


Mark this is so well constructed to make the reader absorb the exceptional tenderness of the subject. Very very well done my friend. I know what you are saying in the last line and it's true but you also are very gifted at writing for the reader. This part of the satisfaction that a writer feels, when he/she can capture the reader and you have done this very well here...great stuff!   Write'em cowboy!!
ethome
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16 posted 2001-01-28 02:46 PM


Mark this is so well constructed to make the reader absorb the exceptional tenderness of the subject. Very very well done my friend. I know what you are saying in the last line and it's true but you also are very gifted at writing for the reader. This part of the satisfaction that a writer feels, when he/she can capture the reader and you have done this very well here...great stuff!   Write'em cowboy!!
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17 posted 2001-01-28 04:10 PM


Mark,
I can't add much except I agree with all of the above. I think you just jumped to a new level. Sy

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18 posted 2001-01-28 07:29 PM


Mark, this is beautiful, just beautiful.  I know the "lady" in question should love this.  And again, beautiful.    Hugs,  ME
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19 posted 2001-01-28 07:37 PM


mark..this was beautiful..  

hugs, g


"i was thinkin'
if you were lonely
maybe we could leave here
and no one would know
at least not to the point where we would think so..."


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20 posted 2001-01-28 10:03 PM


When did it show?

When once again I opened my eyes to see
The blessing of you ... you bestowed on me

In whispers ...
                      etching your words in the songs you sing
In tears ...
                     cleansing your doubt to make room for two
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Mark~ Believe in yourself to reach "beyond the glass bridge".
Great write from you my poet friend.
Deb

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21 posted 2001-01-28 10:13 PM


Mark--

Beautiful affections expressed in this and your format presents it very nicely.  Enjoyed the read.

take care,
Poeminister

"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet."
-Plato


[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 01-28-2001).]

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22 posted 2001-01-28 10:23 PM


Mark~ This is so wonderful I love the heaven gone wild......that works for me   -SEA
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23 posted 2001-01-29 01:09 AM


Oh my goodness Mark, this has climbed to the
tops of my "favorites" list...I still hold a
special few near and dear but I'm allowed as
those were written just for me....but this
one is so beautiful...etched with style and
grace...even the most beautiful butterfly
wings would pale next to the beauty of this
piece Mark....Your poetry shines a light on
your heart like nothing else my friend and
to watch it glow is like watching a star
being born in the darkest night....stunning
sweet poet....simply stunning~



You can swim in the waves of the weave...without sinking into the mind of the weaver~


snowpants
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24 posted 2001-01-29 11:46 AM


'Your touch ...
                          just as gentle as the breath of a child
Your reach ...
                         more than the span of two hearts in time
Your charm ...
                        filled with the passion of heaven gone wild
Your words ...
                       ringing as silent as a cathedral's chime'

These are some fantastic comparisons, Mark!  You have penned some excellent lines here, m'friend.  Love the style, too!

sp  


Never leave me, never go...
I need you here, I need to know...
You will always be
Close to me

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25 posted 2001-01-29 01:18 PM


Mark~  Wow all different emotions ran through me as I read this....it's excellent, outstanding.....WOW!!   a divine read my friend...




Greeneyes~




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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



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26 posted 2001-01-29 01:33 PM


Mark,
There's not much I can add to what our PoetFriends have said above only to tell you that each I day get to open up a poem you post brings me much delight sweetie...
Your poetry is exquisite...
~coco~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
27 posted 2001-01-30 01:08 AM


Marge-Thank you so much.  I thought I would try a little something new in the format arena.  I am glad you liked it my friend.

James-Thank you much.

Koko-I am glad you thought so.  Thank you kindly.

Agust P-I am glad you liked it.  Thanks for stopping by.

Marsha-I am glad the images came out in this one no matter how soft.  Thank you much.

Karilea-Thank you for the kind words.  Always nice to get them from you.

Kit-My friend, I do thank you for the wonderful reply and I am glad you liked the style and the signature.

Charisma-And it is always nice to have you grace me with your sweet words.  Thank you so much.

JM-Well, I did a different style as you requested and YES I am trying to work on the sonnet thing.  I am not promising anything anytime soon though okay?  Thank you for your never ending supply of enthusiasm and I hope she knows how lucky I feel that she would ask me to not give up on her.  

suthern-Sneak up on me it did and while it is only in the phase of a deep love of respect and friendship, I do hope that her and I will be able to see just where it leads one day.  Thank you very much for your kind words once again.

Amy-Thank you so much my friend.  I hope someday to let a little of it out in the open instead of leaving it inside for now.

Victoria-You honor me by adding it to your favorite list and I thank you dearly.

Virginia-That is it exactly.  While the emotions may be for her, the writing is my way of releasing it a bit since she and I cannot be together right now.

kcsgrandma-If I succeeded in making you think of the same questions then I am very happy.  Thank you for those very kind words.

ethome-Well, with a reply as wonderful as that how could I not agree to keep writing.  Thank you so much my friend.  Nice to see you back with us.

Sy-Crawled and climbed is more like it.   Thank you kind sir.  You always honor me with such kindness.

Mother_Earth-I truely hope she does and I hope she knows that it all comes straight from the heart.  Thank you so much for always lighting up my day.

Gale-Thank you so much.  I am glad you found it beautiful.

Deb-With the inspiration you always leave behind, how could I not.  Thank you dearly my poet friend for always bringing a smile to me.  

Poeminister-Was a test style and something definitely new to me so I am truely happy that you liked it.  Thank you much.

SEA-I think that would work for most of us.  Thank you very much.

Holly-Wow.........now what am I to say to that without getting myself caught in a trail of butterfly wings.  Thank you so much and for you to move this to the top of your favorites says more and means more than I could ever begin to say.  Thank you my sweet friend and forever SM.  Hugs to you.

snowpants-The comparisons were quite vivid when they came out so I am glad you liked them.  Thanks so much my friend and Cardinal fan to be.

Greeneyes-So many superlatives........WOW........thank you so very much.

Coco-Whether it is or not, you never fail to make me feel that it is.  Thank you so very much for always being there.  You are highly treasured and not just by me but everyone here.



If you find yourself stranded in a storm
...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together

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28 posted 2001-01-30 12:26 PM


this goes in my library, this is awesome Mark so incredible, speaks from the heart.
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29 posted 2001-01-30 12:34 PM


Hi Mark--I'm so glad I went back to read this again, because I realized I never replied...I must be getting old...this is so beautifully done, my friend...awesome comes to mind but is not big enough...hugs!!
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30 posted 2001-01-30 02:07 PM


Mark-Splendid read, your words are so tender and touching.
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31 posted 2001-01-30 02:10 PM


....and the words did make me cry. Or, was it the thought behind them? The beauty in them?
It matters not,
for tears are undescerning.

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32 posted 2001-01-30 05:44 PM


whatEVER
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33 posted 2001-01-30 05:50 PM


enjoy the read
vandana
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enjoy the read
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35 posted 2001-01-31 11:59 AM


Such lovely thoughts!  What a gifted poet you are.  
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36 posted 2001-02-05 01:07 PM


Mark, I missed a good one here where have I been?

"I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis



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37 posted 2001-02-05 01:14 PM


Hi Mark,

Pure poetry, so very much enjoyed, thank you.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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38 posted 2001-02-06 06:40 PM


Mark, I missed this when it was first here, and I see I found buried treasure.
Well it was all said before, but yes, this is exquisite.
Sandra


Dream as if you'll live forever; Live as if you'll die today.
— James Dean



jonmcm
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39 posted 2001-02-06 06:47 PM


Mark, this was a great poem to read, and I loved the twist at the end. Bril!

Jon

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40 posted 2001-02-06 07:14 PM


Dear Mark, that was soooo beautiful! Then again, everything you write is. I enjoy everything you write. I hope all is well with you.

Sincerely,
Sauni


Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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41 posted 2001-02-06 07:18 PM


Sooooooooooo beautiful!! EVERYTHING YOU WRITE IS WONDERFUL! TAKE CARE.

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
42 posted 2001-02-06 08:14 PM


Rosebud1229-To be added to your library is a great honor for me.  Thank you so much.

Martie-If you feel the awesome is not big enough then just make sure the hug is.   Thank you my friend.  I am glad that you came back also.

Gemini-Thank you much.  I am glad you enjoyed.

seraphin-Thank you so much for letting me know this one touched you so greatly.

snowpants-So which one of the Cardinals do you want on your Jersey?  

vandana-Thank you much.(twice even)

Tennessee Angel-I don't know about gifted but definitely "touched" in the head a bit. Thank you so much.

Kathleen-I don't even know where I have been so don't worry as long as you are found now.  Thank you kindly.

Cerenity-I am glad you enjoyed and stopped to let me know. Thank you dearly.

Sandra-If you consider it buried treasure then I am elated to have you find it.  Thank you so very much.

Jon-Twist???? What twist????...LOL  It just sort of came out that way.  Thank you much.

Saunni-SO very nice to see you back in here with us.  Thank you much for the always kind words.  Seeing that you are in W. VA....I guess that makes us neighbors now doesn't it? Oh.......and thank you for the double come back.

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43 posted 2001-02-06 08:59 PM


Mark,
   This is enchanting.  Your ambiance of emotions is breathtaking...
        Elise

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44 posted 2001-02-06 09:05 PM


OK...ready...VENTURA

Except, the colors will be blue and orange instead of red and white...just a minor change...hehe

...if I ride these dreams to the Irish Sea,
oh, even there, I know your heart rides with me...

Rosebud1229
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45 posted 2001-02-07 12:15 PM


Mark simply exquisite as usual, The pen sometimes does tell the story not just for others as you've said but for ourselves.
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