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Iwritethepoems
Junior Member

since 2001-01-21

Posts 25

0 posted 2001-01-26 12:39 PM

There are three of them
one is a protector, Tall, lean and muscular
his name is Stephen and he's strong
don't mess with him,
he is my bodyguard
he protects me when no one else could.
He is always there, lifting, defending,
to my aid,
whenever I need him.

There is Brianna
she is passion and pure sexuality
like the wind
fire and ice
fueled but not free,
sometimes
in her fantasies
she releases the drive
inside, unashamed.

There is me
quiet, scared, afraid I'm not good enough
not pretty and not smart
and guilty as sin and stupid,
unsophisticated and vulnerable
and no one really means anything they say
but I care about people
kindness and small children.

Someday, they will be one
strong, passionate, and caring
and free.

Yes, someday they will be whole
and so will all of you.

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

1 posted 2001-01-26 12:58 PM

is this about a multi-personality disorder? just curious.... i really didn't understand it, but i found it an interesting read. thanks for posting

desperado
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx

2 posted 2001-01-27 12:30 PM

well this poem was nice and descriptive, but it didn't go anywhere. we met three people who obviously interact in the way they do things and yet we have no interaction. like a photograph of three people standing together. nothing to make the read feel intimate with them. what are they doing? how are they separated? why should the reader care about them? answer those questions and this will be a better poem.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-01-27 08:07 AM

sad

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 01-27-2001).]

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

4 posted 2001-01-27 02:50 PM

I did understand, been there and felt that. I'm still not a whole, but at least I've come to terms with myself.

Iwritethepoems
Junior Member

since 2001-01-21

Posts 25

5 posted 2001-02-02 01:15 PM

Thank you Inotb for understanding, yes it's about MPD,
thank you all for reading!

[This message has been edited by Iwritethepoems (edited 02-02-2001).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2001-02-02 03:46 PM

Wow...I think you did a good job describing the turmol that takes place with MPD.

~ Ruth
www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html

Iwritethepoems
Junior Member

since 2001-01-21

Posts 25

7 posted 2001-02-02 04:31 PM

Thank you Hoot Owl and your web page is absolutely beautiful.

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