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Sven
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0 posted 2001-01-25 11:04 PM


somewhere between
dusk and sunset
between
sunset and moonrise
        there is twilight

somewhere else between
dawn and moonrise
between
moonset and sunrise
        there is twidark

and in

twilight
swans in
rain and
1wolf at
his idea
does god
seek the
twilight

but in

twidark
swims a
void of
gold in
a sea a
wet dry
twidark

but
in dark
there is light
and in light
there is
dark

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.




[This message has been edited by Sven (edited 01-26-2001).]

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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2001-01-25 11:07 PM


If there was no light, there would be no darkness, and if there was no darkness, there would be no light.

Well done Sven.

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2 posted 2001-01-26 10:12 AM


Great poem, Sven, and I think extremely creatively done.
Sandra

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3 posted 2001-01-26 11:10 AM


gotta love them that make up words....for poetic sake!
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4 posted 2001-01-26 07:37 PM


Sven,
    Superb comparison. Magical imagery...
         Much love, Elise

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5 posted 2001-01-26 08:06 PM


Sven dear heart, I really think this is one of your best, it truly is. Just what the girls would have whooped over if this had been there to finish off our meal. (It was alright it was a quiet night the restaurant were glad we were there really)

This would definitely have got extravagant cheers, and it would have deserved them. Into my library with you so come the next meal they can have you with their irish coffees.
You do know I love this one don't you? Because I do.  
Take care as always love
                   Mushy
                      
                  


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
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6 posted 2001-01-26 10:42 PM


They must coexist always.  Just like the sun and the moon.  For it is through the darkness of death that the light of eternal life shines.  Wow, too deep for me tonight!!  LOL.  That is all I will say except, nice writing.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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7 posted 2001-01-27 11:29 PM


Elizabeth. . . thank you my friend. . .

Sandra. . . thank you, just came out this way. . .  

Sunshine. . . what do you mean made-up??  It's right here in my dictionary!!!

Elise. . . thank you. . .  

Marsha. . . keep that up and you're going to give me a big head (I know. . . too late!!). . . but I've always thought that I go better with Lattes than Irish Creme. . . LOL

LW. . . no doubt. . . that is WAY too deep for you!!  LOL. . . thanks for reading. . .  

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8 posted 2001-01-27 11:33 PM


Well Sir...my 1957 dictionary says 'taint no such thang...but then again...

it didn't address any of the ones that Martie and I worked up 'tither...

and of course...you have poetic poetical license....

'cause I naughtily notarized it 'cause I are one...

LOL...

SHOW ME THE DICTIONARY!....lol...

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9 posted 2001-01-27 11:42 PM


Sven~
I just plain downright LOVE this !
~*Marge*~


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