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Love's Magician
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Love's Magician |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Love’s Magician, do not divulge thy secrets For I would prefer not to lose the illusion And in doing so, destroy my innocence As long as I remain in blissful confusion, Do not force such a crushing consequence Your spell is woven and cannot be unmade Let me participate in such sleight of hand To be witness to the magic on thy stage, To be more than this, more than man For if you were to loose thy binding grip And let the audience shake free, All the layers would begin to strip And fall away unmercifully Take not thy tricks, nor hypnotizing eyes The wonder of a child in the throes of belief, Nor the truth I see though I know them to be lies, That, I think, would turn all thy works unto grief For that I will beg of thee, Love’s Magician, Keep me in trance and under this condition |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderfully said. The air of mystery holds much passion to be cherished. I was told that if I read your works I would be in for a real treat and I should have known from the source that would be the case. You just proved it. Excellent penning. The cadence and the rhyme scheme were perfect and the feeling it leaves you with is remarkable. I will definitely be reading more of your works. Searching them out as a matter of fact. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Wonderfully done Poetic Knight..enjoyed your words very much..  ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Poetic Knight, you write of love's magician but you have write knight magic! write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For I would prefer not to lose the illusion And in doing so, destroy my innocence As long as I remain in blissful confusion, Do not force such a crushing consequence ==================== To be more than this, more than man ==================== Take not thy tricks, nor hypnotizing eyes The wonder of a child in the throes of belief, Nor the truth I see though I know them to be lies, That, I think, would turn all thy works unto grief For that I will beg of thee, Love’s Magician, Keep me in trance and under this condition ========================= excellent PK ... you've put many a metaphor to poetic good use here ... as well as clever and unique vocabulary choices. the cadence and flow add to the pleasures of this cool write. "All the layers would begin to strip And fall away unmercifully" very cool lines of emotional imagery... love does indeed allow us those rose colored glasses ... superb penning poet sir ... once again. "she calls me baby ... she calls everybody baaaaby". ~jc mellencamp~ ;) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all very much, the magic is your reply. And JM, I'm not worthy! *L* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I liked this much...I know the feeling well-- "if this is a dream? DON'T PINCH ME!!!" lol... nice quill ya got there. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Poetic Knight--Beauifully written! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Have I ever told you I really love your nickname. What a perfect title to be known as..Poetic Knight. And this writing, well, it is perfect as well, and a feeling I am very familiar with. Much enjoyed. Sandra |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you Martie. Thank you Sandra, I really couldn't think of anything for a name, that's such a hard thing to come up with. *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I REPEAT---very nice poem. (or are ya just gonna keep ignoring ME?) roflmao..... |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
How could I ignore you Serenity? *L* Thanks. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I've just joined your fan club, it seems and You have entranced me with your gift of verse. Being an incurable romantic, your poems are Magic! This one in particular because i too have such a love, but alas he doesn't know! He has even left what little we had. Needy now of his comfort, I find your poems remind me of him. I hope you don't mind? A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
quote: "And JM, I'm not worthy! *L*" *smiling here* ... still think your not worthy? .... ahhh I do so love when my fellow poets prove me right  see the poetry thru our eyes ... 'tis a lovely view poet sir Heaven bound on wings of love, there's so much that you can rise above. I surrender heart and soul, sacrificed to a higher goal. ~DepechMode~ |
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