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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-01-25 09:56 AM







In heaven’s light
many miracles occur
to smile down on us

In heaven’s light
Many tragedies occur
Heaven holds us up

Under this, the light
Let me smile within your face
Loving passion’s grace

In heaven’s light
Many passions can be found
For you, there is Me

I will fly in you
Be your wings, carry you through
In heaven’s light



01.25.01

© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-25 10:21 AM


"In heaven’s light
Many passions can be found
For you, there is Me"


LOVE this!   -SEA
(This is so perfect)

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2 posted 2001-01-25 10:32 AM


Very pretty, Sunshine.  Light...lovely light.

I am learning more about senyru, me thinks.  I didn't know it could be several stanzas.  I must learn more yet.  Of course until December, I didn't even know there was such a form. ;o}

KokoStewartKoomoa
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3 posted 2001-01-25 10:55 AM


senryu sequence and very nice...actually it qualifies to be termed a choka. smiles I enjoyed it it whatever we want to term it

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko



Poeminister
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4 posted 2001-01-25 11:38 AM




Sunshine--Love these.  My favorite is the last one.  

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"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe





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5 posted 2001-01-25 11:49 AM


lovely senryu's sunshine..enjoyed

                 ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Paula Finn
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6 posted 2001-01-25 12:45 PM


Beautiful as always dearheart...shine on

We all have wings...some of us don't know why


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7 posted 2001-01-25 02:20 PM


oh Sunshine....these sunryu's are heavenly....each of them are jewels.
love them all.

Charisma

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8 posted 2001-01-25 02:26 PM


"In heaven’s light
Many passions can be found
For you, there is Me

I will fly in you
Be your wings, carry you through
In heaven’s light"

Someone is very very fortunate - I shall imagine your support nonetheless - my wings have faltered of late

marvelous senryus truly

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9 posted 2001-01-26 01:27 PM


Ya know some poems I read almost shout at ya.
Yours seem to have a soft,gentle whisper as I read thru them.
You do have a bit of magic in that pen of yours.
Very nice.
                    Mr.Magoo

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10 posted 2001-01-26 01:41 PM



Oh, Karilea, this haiku poem is just beautiful, what an inspirational verse of God's love and friendship!  Your light is well appreciated by all of us at Passions   ~Hugs Ms. Sunshine~

Take care,
Ms. Melybee


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



Sunshine
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11 posted 2001-01-27 05:15 PM


Thank you all for your beautiful comments...I know I shouldn't string my senryus together...just can't help myself, do like the word "choka"...brings a lovely, gemlike quality to the string of words....
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