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Victoria
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0 posted 2001-01-24 09:27 PM


A rainbow leaps' over  mountain peaks'
Blending into the meadow's below
Kaleidoscope kites, gold they seek
Pastel ribbon's in the breeze flow
Kissed softly by the sun, aglow
In the shower of lilac rain
The raindrop's dancing as kite wind's blow
A prism upon a windowpane
To some it looks like stringy chow mein
Ray's of chopsticks' yellow gold
Steaming in mist of summer champagne
Color's of mixed vegetables' bold
Touch gently the rainbow ribbon skies'
Reach out and touch gently with your eye's

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Denise
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1 posted 2001-01-24 09:42 PM


This is very beautiful, Victoria! Lovely!

Denise

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2 posted 2001-01-25 12:30 PM


Touch gently the rainbow ribbon skies'
Reach out and touch gently with your eye's


I love the ending to this colorful poem.  I enjoyed the imaginative descriptions very much.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

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3 posted 2001-01-25 12:37 PM


Lovely, I do so love to watch kites, especially the long streamer kind and fancy ones at the seaside.

This conjusrs wonderful images!

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4 posted 2001-01-25 07:01 AM


lovely images, V.
Last 2 lines particularly felt good  
S

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5 posted 2001-01-25 08:17 AM


this is beautiful Victoria...fabulous write, love the imagery.
well done.

((hugs))
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6 posted 2001-01-25 08:50 AM


"A prism upon a windowpane
To some it looks like stringy chow mein
Ray's of chopsticks' yellow gold
Steaming in mist of summer champagne"

STANDING OVATION!!! This poem is filled with such creative expression and a strong voice. Love this figurative language, it's perfect! I love kite-flying too, when I control the kite, I feel so relaxed watching it soar. Excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2001-01-25 12:48 PM


Denise..thank you ..nice hearing from you as always

Kcsgrandma..thank you and thank you for peeking in

VAS..I like kites too, brings back memories of when i use to fly them with my children.glad you
enjoyed

sandra..so nice to hear from you HUGS..

Charisma..thank you very much..always nice
hearing from you HUGS

NOAH. oh my thank you for that ovation ha..
so nice of you to say..pleased you enjoyed.HUGS

                       ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



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