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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-01-24 01:36 AM

Scratches
Virginia Salter

scratches on the patio glass
like fingernails against my spine
grating on every nerve
blackness of night
creates an eeriness
to their sounds

intermittently
they occur, many strokes
than silence
as I await, wondering
will they return or cease
will I be plagued
or freed
from the agony
of their piercing strains
or will the sounds
grow deeper
carving a reminder
into my being
that

the cat is at the door

© January 23, 2001

KokoStewartKoomoa
Senior Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 580
Waikiki, Hawaii

1 posted 2001-01-24 01:42 AM

let me in ...it's cold outside Mommy! I thought it might be raccoons

I used to have them nightly. Nice poem...loved it!

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-01-24 01:42 AM

I liked this much? but mind you? on a personal level? it reminded me of my own PMS....get very sensitive to sound then...thanks for a view of meself in yer mirror, there...very vivid, very apt...and I even looked for the cat (s)

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2001-01-24 01:50 AM

Wow! and even more wows! This was just so intense, very well penned and the ending hits hard!~very unique. I relate.

Take care,
Melissa

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-01-24 07:35 AM

Thank you all!
Awfully cute, Melissa!
Serenity, you made me laugh right out loud, truly!
Melissa, thanks, so you liked the ending? Ye, I guess.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-01-24 01:15 PM

bump...and Sunshine, if you pop in, I had wanted more space between the last line of this piece and the rest of it...to lengthen the suspense. Are you able to edit it for me?

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

6 posted 2001-01-24 06:22 PM

This was fun VAS, thanks.
I wasn't thinking cat, 'cause mine stay in, but maybe a branch in the wind . . .

kraw'

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

7 posted 2001-01-24 06:22 PM

This was fun VAS, thanks.
I wasn't thinking cat, 'cause mine stay in, but maybe a branch in the wind . . .

kraw'

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

8 posted 2001-01-24 07:37 PM

Thanks, Krawdad!

Thanks, Krawdad!

Sorry, I couldn't resist! ;o}
Sorry, I couldn't resist! ;o}

spiked
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

9 posted 2001-01-24 07:55 PM

Mystery and anticipation, Nice write.
Rich

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

10 posted 2001-01-24 08:08 PM

Thanks, loads, Rich!

Glad you enjoyed!

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