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Confessions of a scribbler(2000th post)
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Confessions of a scribbler(2000th post) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Come take a peek into his world His million thoughts zoom around on bullet brooms in a multi-pressure boiler Bouncing and colliding, they scream, they yell but none is to be heard a word-lover marvels at the majesty of twenty-six letters with their numerous permutations yet bemoans how fake his empty words appear on paper, capturing no essence of himself his million thoughts speed around, carrying frowning sulks at not being penned down "we dislike our incompetent owner" they exclaim ****************************** a wannabe word weaver wishes to set the world ablaze, with his curious lexical choices and fresh-eyed introspective views that will REdefine the world yet is aghast at how his writings come across as amateurish and cliched (in fact, he pauses to think, he is using a cliche to describe the cliched), perhaps showing him the person he is, a coward, a follower, always thick in the shadowy footsteps of others, with himself fading into oblivion, nothing else to be offered ****************************** he should call it a day he is weary of the way he fumbles around with words, arranging them in any old way and daring to pass them off as poetry he often ponders: are the great poets turning in their graves when they see how the mediocre abuses their craft, his writings are like instant coffee, easy to brew but lacking in substance ***************************************** he has his misgivings but he is compelled to write, to write, TO WRITE, WRITE, WRITE WRITE, WRITE, WRITE, a primitive chant that grabs his body, mind and soul(yet another cliche!!) til he is powerless, senseless, defenseless to do anything else but W R I T E, saying it all--his livelihood author's note:i apologise for the shouting.i know its rude. [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaile~ 'his writings are like instant coffee, easy to brew but lacking in substance' Brilliant ! Soooooooo ... that alone blows your theory ! A wonderful read from you, my friend. Congratulations on reaching this milestone - Now, pour me a cup of that sweet cliche !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
kaile my friend. . . CONGRATULATIONS!!!! This is excellent. . . I think that it might be the longest poem I've read from you!!  Truly you are not a scribbler, but indeed a wonderful person and poet. . . best wishes for the next 2,000 my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
yet bemoans how fake his empty words appear on paper, capturing no essence of himself ================================ perhaps showing him the person he is, a coward, a follower, always thick in the shadowy footsteps of others, with himself fading into oblivion, nothing else to be offered ================================ Ooooooo.....I love how you capture the frustration of not being able to say what you want or mean. I could really identify with this piece. "Hearts will become practical when they make them unbreakable" ~The Wizard of Oz Much love all, Krissie |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Congratulation with your 2000....with these outstanding post....wonderful done. great work my friend...hope to read many more from your hand. (((hugs))) Charisma |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you all, towards late i have been reflecting on my writing and i feel i have reached a plateau, unable to break through...i appreciate you reading this(yes, sven, its the longest piece i have written so far and it could be even longer if i didnt restrain myself  ) as i srtive to probe deep into myself so as to break through my barrier...i think its funny: the longer i write, the more i think i am not a good writer...i may be nagging here(argh!) but i appreciate the words of encouragement you guys have for me... on an up note, i have reached 2000 posts!!believe me, i never knew my interest in writing could be sustained for so long |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is great, Kaile! I especially loved the instant coffee line! I think you are being too hard on yourself, though. So keep writing! Congratulations on 2000!! Denise |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
his million thoughts speed around, carrying frowning sulks at not being penned down "we dislike our incompetent owner" they exclaim Your thoughts should be smiling now, Kaile! This is an excellent write. And congratulations on 2000!To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very well stated. So many of us have surely had these thoughts, yet not so well expressed. This is a fine collection and I too was stopped to give awe to the comparison of instant coffee...easy, yet lacking substance. Oh those two lines are my favorite but I would not cut out ANY of this poem...even the stressed words. It did not feel rude, it felt like I was almost saying them in my insanity to write, write, write! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Kaile--Wonderfully written. Congrats on 2000! Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Well, belated congrats on your 2000th post. This was a wonderful write from you and I don't care what plateau you think you might be stuck on......I continually see you growing in each one of them so whether it is a gradual slope or a steep incline that you conquer....we will be here to share it with you. btw....shout all you want......sometimes it is what is needed to be heard. If you find yourself stranded in a storm ...then reach for my hand and we will play in the puddles together |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
kaile...rant all you want...i dont mind your being loud i find you interesting, humorous, and thought provoking the poets of yesteryear may be turning in their graves..but THEY wrote about 'the bells the bells the bells the bells the bells the bells....." grrr....how boring was THAT!! LOL congrats on 2000!! keep it up (in between lectures of course.. )hugs, g "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to the point where we would think so..." |
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