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This Sweet Spell
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This Sweet Spell |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Easiness, of manner, speak, yawning stretch of slumber reach feather touch of hand in trace kissing lips, your whiskered face damp with welcome morning dew I have had the best of you-- still, but just a stitch of lace-- tide returning to the beach, from fathoms' heartless beating beat.. Oh but to feel those fingers dwell. Pardon of the Lover's Hell, or Heaven, pouting, lips in swell, Desire--starved--ground 'tween my teeth; take you now, what's left of me. Pull the rope that rings this bell. Swallow salt sweet from the sea, Pacify my lips--this dream-- and wake me not, alone in Hell. Keep me now, within your keep, Wake me not from this sweet spell. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Serenity-- Your words are a sweet spell--beautifully penned. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
"Wake me not alone in Hell"....Wow S'en...you wove what my dreams are made of these days....your graceful pen weaves the beauty...and the fear of it going away....Hugs to you my dear friend...love you girlie~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Easiness, of manner, speak, yawning stretch of slumber reach feather touch of hand in trace kissing lips, your whiskered face damp with welcome morning dew I have had the best of you-- still, but just a stitch of lace-- tide returning to the beach, from fathoms' heartless beating beat.. Oh but to feel those fingers dwell. ===================== oh my ... me girlie ..your casting some sweet spells of your own.. Sen this is soooo mmm mmm mmm lovely like I keep telling ya baby .. there is something fine in the water down there ...  pure poetry me twin |
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Iwritethepoems Junior Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 25 |
sounds the perfect passionate dream come true! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
The first stanza, sensual, romantic, blessed with a superb relationship. The rest makes me think something happened to change the relationship. The others don't seem to see that, so I'm wondering if I'm all wet in my thinking. Can you explain the change in 'feel' to the last half of the piece, or even if I should be sensing a change, please? |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I've missed your words K. This is swirling itself around me in warm (and gentle) gusts. Thanks. *Peace you. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
...bump... |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Bravo Serene, sounds like you are brewing up somethin' Rich |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh wow....(yes, doreen "WOW", LOL) I want to thank you all, but mostly to VAS? No way are you all "wet"--grin--second stanza? was just the transition of the relationship to unbridled *yep, folks, ya read that right* sexuality... So...again? HUGS to FORUM? and? (heh heh heh) hopefully? more to come... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Serenity- This one goes (yep you're right) straight to my most highly treasured box. And forgive me if I use it to take some inspiration - as the setting is what I planned for my next poem. (I'll get to it right after a cold shower~G~) |
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