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Someone Elses' Everything
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Someone Elses' Everything |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You say she is your everything Then why do you need me I may not be your everything But I'm what makes everything complete I'm not the perfect beauty of the rose But the scent that you remember I'm not the sparkle and fizz of champagne Just the taste that lingers on your lips I'm not the roller coaster ride I'm the feeling in your belly when its over I'm the dream you know you had That left you breathless and wanting I'm the star you can't quite see The one that holds your imagination So I may not be your everything But if you stop and think I may not be your everything Just everything you cant live without |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
WOW! Does this ever ring true! Beautifully written. I know too well where you are coming from... from both the woman's perspective and my own. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
nicely written and expressed. enjoyed. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
"I may not be your everything Just everything you cant live without" This wrapped it up so well...perfectly expressed!!!  Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Mr.Magoo Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 104 |
You said alot here. That last line is one that`ll stay in my mind.Ya know one of them quotes that stick with ya for life. Very Nicely written. Mr.Magoo |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula love, you are everything and a bit more, this is utterly truly wonderful love. This is your writing at its absolute best, this is the type of writing that everyone wants but can't aspire too. And you have it, that certain quality that makes others sigh because they have to work at it and you make it look easy. It is as natural as breathing is for others. Utterly wonderful dear heart. Take care love Mushy  < !signature-->Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You are the icing on the cake ..I enjoyed your words Paula.. nicely written~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Oh ... I like these thoughts ! And this - 'I'm not the perfect beauty of the rose But the scent that you remember' Ohhhhhhhhh, yes ! Wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Paula, this is great! I love the conclusion...passion with some punch! Robert Joseph [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 01-23-2001).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jeff...uts nice to see a man looking from both sides...thank you darlin Mike...thank you I appreciate your nice comments Pepper...sometimes what you think you need isnt what you really need at all...you've just held that hope so long you dont know how to let go...thanks Mr Magoo...nice to know I can write something that will stay in your mind than you for such a lovely compliment Marsha...you fill up my head with you words of praise and make me feel like a true poet Victoria...such sweet words from you thanks Marge...what? You didnt like the roller coaster ride? Thank you sweet lady Robert Joseph...what other kind of punch is there but the passionate kind? Thanks We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting thoughts...yes they are...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Paula, what a write! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Oh WOW Paula..I want to be someone's everything..I thought I was once...am hoping again to be this time...someday very nicely done..huggzzzz ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Paula - This is great - I loved it!!! Frankie |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Paula, this one is marvelous, and your so right. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Paula...this poem portrays a very sad situation that I'm sure many of us can relate to. A well told yet sad story in verse |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I've precious little time 'online' and still less of it here of late, so when I'm fortunate enough to read a poem of such quality and wisdom - that touches me to the core ... simply let me say You are the scent -and you are all these things and more - you should know you are valued beyond any words that could be expressed here. |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
WOW Paula.... < !signature-->I loved this!!! I could relate to this so well..Someone in my life that makes me feel just like I could have written this..Thanks for a wonderful read...I wanna keep this one.. Hugs ~LL~The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown [This message has been edited by Lady Lightning (edited 01-24-2001).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow paula! what a concept..i didnt even expect that last line...! great write..love it! hugs, g "...beyond the door, theres peace i'm sure...and i know there'll be no more tears in heaven..." clapton |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
James...LOL babe...yeah pretty much so huh? Sunshine...thanks...glad you liked it Wynter...so do I...someday Frankie...glad you enjoyed Rosebud...LOL well I can be pretty straightforward at times...dont know if thats a good thing or not Hoot_owl_rn...mmmmm not so much sad as well not angry really...just trying to make a point...thanks Bill...all I can say to that is THANK YOU LL...by all means keep it and thank you...you do me an honour fallen rain...the twist...makes for more interesting reading dont you think? Thank you We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I'm the dream you know you had That left you breathless and wanting I'm the star you can't quite see The one that holds your imagination' Whew! Is this ever true!! Excellent, excellent write, Paula! This one I'm keepin'! sp Never leave me, never go... I need you here, I need to know... You will always be Close to me |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
sp...thank you sweetie...glad you liked it well enough to keep...hugs We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Paula, a beautifully written poem. Very nice. BC |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
You tell him, Paula..What a fool, hm? How is it that certain people cannot see the wonderful love and joy that is right under their nose, while they refuse to look. Sigh..think I relate a little? This is a VERY good poem, clear voice ringing with some intense thoughts. Best wishes to you, I hope he wakes up before it is too late. Sandra |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hello Sir Bill...so nice to have you visit...thank you so much Sandra...it would be nice if he would see...in time perhaps in time...thank you We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, Full of scents and sensitivity, beautiful write! But I knew it would be after reading your name attached! write on, passionate one Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Nicely stated. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister "Awaiting welcome light of glory's gold, I search the night to fan salvation's spark." --Claire Brown Bower |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
So well expressed with these poetic words of truth. This is such good writing Paula wow! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Kethry...aawww girl you make me blush...thank you for the great compliment Poeminister...thank you ethome...coming from a poet such as yourself the words you give me are a gift thank you sweet poet man We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful poem... powerful and memorable. Well done! |
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