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Kethry
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0 posted 2001-01-22 09:00 AM


I'll weave for you dreams of flesh
Said the beggar to the queen
A daring weave of intimate mesh
Part reality and part dream
And he wove…
Counting the strands
With deft strong hands
Marking the warp and the weft
And he wove…
With precision bold
He wove brave and gold
Lifting the dream from it's cleft

I'll sing for you dreams of night
Mingle the joy and the bliss
And if you stand and do not take fright
I'll mix in some dark abyss
And he sang…
A dreamer's song
As the weave moved along
The music was caught in the weave
And he sang…
A siren's pure tune
And he courted the moon
To cast dreams for the sorrowing eve

I'll bleed for you dreams of power
To keep vigil over the day
Where meek and might is joined this hour
And the weave shows the truth and the way
And he bled…
In tapestry of pain
To wake the sun again
As the moon and the stars stood still
And he bled…
The weave taking the hue
Mingled old and the new
To dream power and direct queenly will

I'll weave for you dreams of flesh
While the queen took the weave for her own
Wove the beggar, into the mesh
As the dream and the weave had both flown
And he died…
As the queen grew
In the wisdom she knew
Had come from the weave of the cloth
And he died…
Till the power withdrew
It went with him too
The queen  was left, bereft, sore and wroth



Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



© Copyright 2001 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2001-01-22 09:40 AM


Kethry,
Well you wove me up in your blanket of dream.
And I feel like I don't want to wake up or take it off. Beautiful write. Sy

Sunshine
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2 posted 2001-01-22 09:58 AM


Kethry....amazing!  Brava!
peppermint35
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3 posted 2001-01-22 10:02 AM


Enchanting!!!  I'm saving this one to be read again and again

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Kethry
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4 posted 2001-01-22 03:32 PM


Sy, Thank-you. I was not sure where I was going with this the ending surprised me...but it fits.

Kari-lea, Thank-you for the Brava, I was not sure I had hit the target.I'm glad to know you liked it.

Pepper, Thank-you for the enchanting.
live long, with song


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2001-01-22 03:39 PM


Excellent penning (or should I say weaving).  This one really grabs ahold of you and doesn't let you go.  I enjoyed it much.
Kethry
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6 posted 2001-01-22 03:56 PM


Mark,
that you should compliment my writing is an honour and privilege, Thank you so much.
Kethry.


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



insect
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7 posted 2001-01-22 04:33 PM


This is excellent!
And the title goes perfect!

Sven
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8 posted 2001-01-22 06:22 PM


wow Kethry. . . this is wonderful. . .

well woven my friend. . .



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Poeminister
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9 posted 2001-01-22 06:26 PM


Enjoyed the read.  Wonderful piece.

Poeminister

catalinamoon
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10 posted 2001-01-22 06:27 PM


Hey Kethry, can I borrow you to weave me some of these dreams..this was fanscinating.
Great style as well.
Sandra

Kethry
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11 posted 2001-01-23 12:25 PM


Insect, thanks for the comment. Sometimes finding just the right title is the hardest part  

Sven, Thank you so for the wow! I appreciate it.

Poeminister,glad you enjoyed this weave.

Cat, you can have my dream weaving. After this I think I'll go back to what I know and the shallow end of the pool. This was way too deep for me.

Be fine, you shine
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Janet Marie
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12 posted 2001-01-23 12:33 PM


I'll bleed for you dreams of power
To keep vigil over the day
Where meek and might is joined this hour
And the weave shows the truth and the way
And he bled…
In tapestry of pain
To wake the sun again
As the moon and the stars stood still
And he bled…
The weave taking the hue
Mingled old and the new
To dream power and direct queenly will
==========
Look at me girlie weavin away ...
WAY COOL write Keth
love the imagery in this ...
and NO DEAR .. you DO NOT belong at the shallow end of the pool ...
youre the life guard  
WEAVE ON gator girl  

Poetry is not an opinion expressed ...
It is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ...
or a smiling mouth.
~Kahlil Gibran~

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