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2am Nightmare
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2am Nightmare |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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2am Nightmare I went and laid my head against your chest, but you weren't there and hatred lurked among the shadows... and pain reached up through roots I had buried I screamed and clawed until I no longer had a voice and fingers were raw.... but ice cold tile stains crimson when evil comes home and reminds me once again I'm nothing "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well...you're certainly not nothing... but of course, this is only a poetical expression - still..a reassurance... I like this - I like the change in format, and I like the flow. You hide the dark undertones with subtlety...yet this is a dark, hurting piece. Well done.  KStrokes of ink, words, dreams like Waking mountains make intimate conversations With my shadow From 'Words in the Night' by Jeff Geddes |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Snow, dark and haunting and very well done! write on Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Frankie Member
since 2001-01-10
Posts 57 |
Snow - Loved this - I know just the feeling when you wrote this. Frankie |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Wow!... very emotional! You are obviously feeling this one deeply. I felt it also. David2 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Oh, I'm so sorry you had such a scary nightmare! But it's only a dream, and you are certainly not nothing, you are a beautiful person witha golden heart that shines with purity! Excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow... such a powerful description of the fear that can come with such a nightmare. You gave me chills! Wonderful work. I hope you write something about your GOOD dreams! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Wake up, Wake up...I'm still here...Wink! Great writing, Babe! Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
severn... *smiles* thank you so much! It's good to hear from you!! Keth, thank you for the comment, I value your opinion. Frankie, it pangs me to know you understand this feeling... thank you for replying *hugs* David2, it was a heck of a night... thank you for taking the time to comment. Noah... *hugs* thank you so much for your kind words, they mean a lot to me! LoveBug, *smile* ohh, don't worry.. I have plenty of pieces written about the good ones ;-) thank you for the reply Robert... I'm wide eyed and awake! *smiling* thank you! Thank you all for your comments, Snow |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice write Snow...James |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you, james. snow |
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