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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2001-01-21 07:21 AM


Shall I Ask Him to Stay?

Is it you? Can it be? Who once broke my heart
Tenderly begging for another start
What can I say after all of the years
How can I dismiss the sorrow and tears

And yet, here we are, the two face to face
Should I laugh or cry or warmly embrace?
I need a moment to think where  I’ve come
The promises broken, the laughter undone

A heartless goodbye still reels in my mind
The manner in which you left me behind
The sorrow was churning and burning my soul
And left me unable to discover my whole

And yet I remember the glorious days
The love and the passion, your soft tender ways
The hope and the dreams we set out to find
The magical moments carved into time

And now face to face, can I tell you the truth?
I have loved you deeply since days of our youth
Everything changes, and time doesn’t stop
But my love wasn’t changed by the hands on a clock

Should I turn you away, or ask you to stay?
Will you hurt me again as you did on that day?
You suddenly appear without even a call
As though nothing happened between us at all

So what shall I say and what shall I do
As I stand here looking so deeply at you?
Admit my love, or tell of my pain?
This agony taunts me again and again

I awake with the dream still fresh in my head
Recurring fantasy haunting my bed
I was talking to him, he was just here with me
This is surely mental telepathy

He must be thinking or dreaming of me
For the dream was so real I still vividly see
Now how should I end this one today
Shall I turn him away, or beg him to stay?

Elizabeth Santos

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-01-21 07:25 AM


For now...he may stay...he will know when it's time to bid adieu...

well done, Lady Santos...

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-01-21 07:29 AM


Oh Liz ... I don't think I could read any faster than that. I was wanting too much to find out how this turned out ... what an emotional roller coaster these words describe, beautifully written (now back I go for a slower read)!  

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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3 posted 2001-01-21 08:59 AM


Ah...the questions we sometimes have to ask ourselves...and sometimes we're the only ones that know the answer

~ Ruth
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Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-01-21 09:11 AM


Elizabeth, love~
There is only ONE answer if he should come your way ~
And I doubt you'd ever have to 'beg'~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2001-01-21 09:45 AM


I really like this poem,,, it hits close to home.

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[This message has been edited by bslicker (edited 01-22-2001).]

Toerag
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6 posted 2001-01-21 11:30 AM


Just tell him to hit the road, ya got Toerag, who could ask for anything more?
jwesley
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7 posted 2001-01-21 11:34 AM


Why must it be a stay or go situation?  Why can't it be a maybe...let's play awhile and see if it's truth or moment?

Anyway...wonderfully questioned, my friend.

jwesley

Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2001-01-21 11:48 AM


I hope everyone understands that this was just another dream, and the question is, how will I end it today. Dream or not, I still have you, Toerag. That's so comforting
Thank you all for your kind remarks
Liz

VAS
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9 posted 2001-01-21 11:50 AM


Powerful piece, excellently crafted.
Love the responses it conjured as well.  Don't know much else to say...agree pretty much with jwesley, and Toerag made me LOL.

But since it's a dream...let him stay, if he will.  Those dreams can be awfully fickle.

Martie
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10 posted 2001-01-21 11:52 AM


Liz--Time is forgiving as well as changing...and your dream may some day be real...opening doors is always a good thing, I think...I loved this poem!
Bill Charles
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11 posted 2001-01-21 01:50 PM


Hello Liz,

I know exactly from where you write these words, and it is a very, very difficult decision to make. You have really brought out some of the feelings that I have.

BC

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12 posted 2001-01-21 04:28 PM


Dreams usually depict our deepest desires or most dreaded fears. This dream may contain a bit of both. I'm sure if it ever becomes a reality, you will know just what to do!

Denise

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13 posted 2001-01-21 04:45 PM


WOW!
This is truely a powerful writing.
I have no answers for your dreams.
I know if it ever does come true,you`ll find the strength to make the right decision.
Very Nice writing.
                     Mr.Magoo
I dont believe that following our hearts is always whats best for us.

mariee66
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14 posted 2001-01-21 07:07 PM


I got that this was a dream, and your question for the day was what to do...go or stay.  This was powerful, and kept me hooked all the way through.  
As always, I love your poetry.
Marie~

Sven
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15 posted 2001-01-21 07:36 PM


beautiful my friend. . .

the dream always knows when to stay. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 2001-01-21 10:44 PM


Elizabeth,
It is an old question, to be or not to be.
But it is always a new answer. Wonderful poem Love Sy

dgvarner
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17 posted 2001-01-21 11:35 PM


much enjoyed this one LIZ..

dreams ..  there is no go or stay when it comes to dreams..they just are as they are..

hugs, g


"i was thinkin'
if you were lonely
maybe we could leave here
and no one would know
at least not to the point where we would think so..."

Rosebud1229
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18 posted 2001-01-21 11:48 PM


If there's love in your heart even after all of those years shouldn't you at least give it a start, to know if it's still love for real or some fantasy feeling that isn't quite real only way to find out is to ask him to stay. Very nice poem
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19 posted 2001-01-22 02:00 AM



hi Elizabeth, a thought provoking read you have shared here PoetFriend...
I'm kinda like Kit I was speeding thru the poem as I too wanted to know the end so when I did finish it I went rite back up to re-read it at normal pace...
Thank you for a most delightful read
*~coco~*

Mark Bohannan
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20 posted 2001-01-22 03:33 AM


This cowboy was completely enveloped in this write of yours my friend.  I too had dreams like this for many many years.  I now know the answer (to mine)but only you can answer yours.  I hope your answer is turns out more positive than mine did. Somehow knowing the size of your heart and the way that you so clearly see things, I don't think you will have a problem finding the right answer for you.  Superb write as always.
Frankie
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21 posted 2001-01-22 01:51 PM


Elizabeth - I enjoyed this one very much - Personally, I would take a chance and ask him to stay.

Frankie

Wilfred Yeats
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22 posted 2001-01-22 02:52 PM


I remember so vividly - when I was in your shoes - some 11 years ago.  we'd been a loving couple - out of the blue - she disappeared - married - within a few months we met again - she divorced - he was a drunk - we dated a few months - and I "turned her away". and will always wonder if she might not have STILL been the best choice - Follow your heart - its's a tough choice.
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