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0 posted 2001-01-20 11:18 PM


***If you don't know, El Dorado is the mythical city of gold that the Spainards thought was in South America.***


So young, so full of life I was
When he took me in his arms
He had to say goodbye then
He was going to El Dorado

The old city of lore
Full of gold and love…
Our love would flourish there, he said
As soon as he found it, he would send for me

Day floated by, then months and years
Without a word from him
I decided, then, to find El Dorado

There were many mountains to climb
I climbed them all
With the vision of a city of gold
With the vision of my golden lover
Always in my eyes

As I reached each summit
Hoping to see gold gleaming
All I saw were more mountains
Which I took on


           Higher

               Was           

       Summit       


Each           

                                              
As

My

Spirit

Sunk

Lower

Each

Day

One summit, I saw an old woman
Although she was blinded, I asked
“Old woman, where is the city of gold?
Where is this land of perfect love and golden dreams?
Where is El Dorado?”

She looked at me with sightless eyes
Though she saw much more than I
She smiled, then laughed and cackled and said
“There is no El Dorado!”

I refused to believe the old woman’s words
I climb the mountains in a frenzy
Thinking that it must be just beyond the horizon

But with each summit I climb
All I see are more mountains to conquer
And no secret city of gold

I sink to my knees
Feeling the snow below them
Instead of the glimmer of gold
Feeling the cold wind
Instead of my lover’s arms
Realizing the unbelievable
Instead of the relief of reaching the goal

There is no perfect human love
There is no golden dream
There is no earth-bound city of gold...

There is no El Dorado




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"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav






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Poet deVine
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1 posted 2001-01-20 11:38 PM


Erica, El Dorado is in each of us..we are the gold that is sought...our hearts hold it. Lovely!!
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2 posted 2001-01-20 11:43 PM


to me this one is great! love it alot. best wishes.

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

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3 posted 2001-01-20 11:44 PM


Kinda reminds me of the country song "There is no Arizona"... I think that's what it's called.  Those kinds of stories/poems/songs always get to me.  *sniff*

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~


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4 posted 2001-01-21 05:16 AM


LoveBug~
The hills of El Dorada is a nifty metaphor !
I like your inspiration for this piece.
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2001-01-21 07:07 AM


very cool write LB ...
excellent imagery ...
a well done weave...with a cool presentation and format
great writing.. unique and creative!!!
take care
jm

When to the sessions of sweet silent thought,
I summon up remembrance of things past ...
I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought.
~Shakespeare~

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6 posted 2001-01-21 09:46 AM


Sharon- I hope you always keep your El Dorado

Girls- Thank you for your kind compliment

Poetic- Thanks! Can't say that I've heard that song. Not much into country!

Marge- This one just wouldn't leave me alone, so I had to write it. Thanks

JM- Your opinion means a lot to me. Thanks for replying.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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7 posted 2001-01-21 09:49 AM


This one kind of puts me in the mind of that new country song "There Is No Arizona"
Sometimes we want what doesn't exist and it's hard to tell ourselves otherwise...not an easy place to be  

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8 posted 2001-01-21 10:21 AM


Hehe, you may not know the song, but at least Hoot Owl here knows of it.  I don't listen to much country but because I live in a very small, boone dock town, I hear it.  It's a very sad song...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~


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9 posted 2001-01-21 10:26 AM


(sigh) Oh, but dear, we all have the magic of El Dorado deep inside our hearts, within a heart of gold. If you nurture it, it will forever shimmer with greatness. Love is like El Dorado. Excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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10 posted 2001-01-21 10:52 AM


Great write!
Love the story in this
A golden poem forsure!


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11 posted 2001-01-21 11:26 AM


Love Bug...What a story you have written here...I was thinking I'd write someting, using the country song, "There is no Arizona" as a guide, and yes, there is no El Dorado either, just you and the ground you walk on...and I think that is probably a lovely place.
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12 posted 2001-01-21 12:05 PM


Fine piece of writing...pulls one along like your hope had.

Let me echo Poet DeVine, please.

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13 posted 2001-01-21 01:05 PM


Gosh, I'm going to have to find this song to see what it's all about!  

Thank you all for your comments.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav



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14 posted 2001-01-21 01:22 PM


This was a wonderful piece to rest my eyes on and the inspiration was tremendous.  I loved the format you penned and of course it goes without saying the imagery was superb.  Loved it completely.

FYI-The song  "There Is No Arizona" is by a country artist by the name of Jamie O'Neil and it is on her first and only album.(as far as I know it to be)  If you get CMT where you live just turn it on and you will see the video and believe me, it is well worth seeing and listening to.  

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Bill Charles
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15 posted 2001-01-21 01:40 PM


Hi Lovebug,

Truly an inspired writing, and well done. But there is an El Dorado, I believe that it is in our heart.

BC

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16 posted 2001-01-21 07:29 PM


See? I TOLD you this was good!  
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