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Snow Fall
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Snow Fall |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
The snow falls… like so many dreams crushed, falling falling d o w n until the sky is clear. They blanket the earth, a virginal blanket of despair. So beautiful, so cold, a desolate wasteland. Once soaring high, they rained, fell fell d o w n and now we are cleaning up the mess the dreams have made. We rub salt into the weeping wounds burning like the salt tears falling falling d o w n ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
What pain expressed here, PoeticEnchantress! But, you have done so excellently. Great images! And, I've got to say, that's quite a signature, too. Wow. sp  I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow... this piece really touched me. Although most dreams fall, some of them are carried on by the wind of fate, and they fall into your lap. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is very clever! The presentation enhances the theme perfectly, and the pain and loss is expressed so well. I love the lines: "we rub salt into the weeping wounds burning" Wow! Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetEnchantress~ 'They blanket the earth, a virginal blanket of despair' This is stark pain, falling in abundance - May the warming come soon. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Thanx... i posted it as soon as i wrote it... and i wrote it as soon as i felt it... ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Your kindasorta' hard to find... This one is a bit tearful. My advice is to get a new outfit, maybe a little different make-up... hit the town with a can of spray paint (don't get caught) then come back and tell me what and how it felt... dale |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
*smiles* Alas! i am unloved my the Current Poets Society! Whatever am I to do? ...Got that can of red spray paint I can borrow? Hehe, sorry, while this poem isn't my normal style... it's basically got the same theme. I'm a cynical little brat, lemme tell ya! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is an awesome piece of work! That just says it all! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
They blanket the earth, a virginal blanket of despair. So beautiful, so cold, a desolate wasteland. Once soaring high, they rained, fell fell d o w n ============== well expressed emotive piece of writing... with a cool presentation like the format here well done take care jm When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
virginal blanket of despair!!! I liked this write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A new twist on a blanket of snow I could feel the pain and dispair in your poem Very well done Liz |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Thank you all very much for your kind replies!  ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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