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snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

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KS

0 posted 2001-01-20 08:11 AM

I tread lightly on the path to your heart;
All that is you I hold dear.
Only my love to you will I impart;
In your time of need, this soul will appear.

The beating of your heart is my only desire;
I'm losing sleep for thoughts of you.
This passion will take us higher;
And all I try to do is an explanation construe.

Right here next to you is my dwelling place;
There's nowhere else I'd rather be.
I'm not giving up this chance for your embrace;
With this, my love, I'm sure you'll agree.

All I want in this very moment in time
Is to be here, by your every breath entranced.
These memories will remain sublime;
Always will I remember how closely we danced.

-kh 01/01

I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2001-01-20 12:38 PM

Very nice, I especially like the last stanza. Memories can be sublime, yes..
Sandra

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2001-01-20 01:17 PM

(sigh) Such a lovely poem, yes, I can relate to this feeling, for I too am lovesick in the longing for love. You will find that love, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

3 posted 2001-01-20 06:07 PM

Sandra: thanks! I'm glad you liked this!

Noah: and I, too, am sure you will find the love you've been looking for as well! thanks for reading!

sp

I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

4 posted 2001-01-21 02:04 AM

I know how it is to lose sleep believe me but some things are just worth it and love sure is one of them. This was a wonderful write my friend. You express your heart well and that is how I know that you must be cherished by your love very deeply. Now let's hope you can put this kind of emotion in your poem for the "CARDINALS"

nope....I am not going to let up on that one til the day you have to write it.

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

5 posted 2001-01-21 02:26 AM

Thanks, Mark, for your wonderful replies.  You know they are always so encouraging to me.  Especially being new at this rhyme thing.
Oh, you poor thing.  You are going to have to wait quite some time, m'friend.  I'll get ya a Snickers ('not goin' anywhere for a while?')  I know, I know--corny.  It's late, what do you want?  LOL

sp

I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

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