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howpeculiar
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0 posted 2001-01-20 05:20 AM



the corporeal goddess:
birthed from polished paper
that suddenly held the life
of mountains in August (beside my faerie stream, with the ferns and wrist-thick moss):
if I respire the dust of my room and close my eyes I taste, instead…
  snow under sunlight slanted through pine boughs (who sigh age, aching).
  the brook glazed silver-slick,
  and underneath, the worker chestnut tan of my father
  folding river stones to smooth in ribbon stumble.
butterfly capture:
beauty thin and flightless
struck with a polished pin
through an insect heart.

Instead,
  the primordial layers of animal breath collapsed beneath my feet.
  woods magic.

imagine the aura trapped-in-photograph of
this Venus
If -- by placing her face and tender shoulder
to the surface of the page --
I have envisioned the verve
to my tributary refuge  
whose splinter melodically imbedded in my heart
has strength enough
to transform one garage (transmuted to bedroom)
into a pixie-playground with my musing…

she has
my age my hair
my reverence.
is it fanatical
to worship
skin and curl of hip?
to see her skin-dressed in a chair
and taste the tears glaze my bottom lip?
She is nothing of a
tiny mouthfuls of facts and interviews
(molded into the creases of my brain
just to watch again
the tilt of her chin in actual motion,
the velvet of her voice,
compassion radiance
around each of her gentle pupils)
combine to the profile of
innocence, vitality,
the female wisdom of 2,000 years…
child to my aesthetic desires,
mother of my lineage;
she is the idol of my choosing, for her simplicity
for her ethereal splendor: mortal and divine.

Her eyes hold my ancestry,
my physical aspiration,
more soul than I will see for years on the streets
of my country;
and as much as can come
from disconnected conversations
through the gaze of photographs
(sweet and somehow real) …
my love

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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-01-20 05:36 AM


howpeculiar? INDEED. You have the same remarkable gift of imagery...shall I quote? grin..I shall:

"the corporeal goddess"

three words and you set the tone.
And? ALL OF THIS.

she has
my age my hair
my reverence.
is it fanatical
to worship
skin and curl of hip?
to see her skin-dressed in a chair
and taste the tears glaze my bottom lip?
She is nothing of a
tiny mouthfuls of facts and interviews
(molded into the creases of my brain
just to watch again
the tilt of her chin in actual motion,
the velvet of her voice,
compassion radiance
around each of her gentle pupils)
combine to the profile of
innocence, vitality,
the female wisdom of 2,000 years…
child to my aesthetic desires,
mother of my lineage;
she is the idol of my choosing, for her simplicity
for her ethereal splendor: mortal and divine.


YEP.

(sweet and somehow real.)


Totally fabulous.


howpeculiar
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since 2000-12-12
Posts 56

2 posted 2001-01-20 01:59 PM



doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
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3 posted 2001-01-20 04:17 PM


excellent writing! how peculiar that i haven't read you yet...hehe...   welcome to the forums and i'll look forward to reading more...
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-01-21 07:52 AM


WOW!!
awesome imagery and use of of metaphor
very cool and unique vocabulary choices
excellent writing

When to the sessions of sweet silent thought,
I summon up remembrance of things past ...
I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought.
~Shakespeare~

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