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0 posted 2001-01-18 07:31 PM


Touching the Looking Glass

touched the looking glass today

                 and my name isn't Alice

fingertips clinking
vitreous silver
but the image
wasn't me…

                imagine my surprise!

it was you looking out
fingertips clinking
vitreous silver

                Alice would have liked this!

amazing how
the touch clinked at the
same instance

thought waves waving cross
acres and acres
miles and miles
bringing smiles and smiles
through the looking glass

                making a winter day warmer and brighter

I couldn't hear you
but heard soft laughing on the wind
and knew it was you…

for I was softly laughing too…

so much you said
in what wasn't said
but all wrapped up with a bow
in the "I understand, I know"
and the prettiest floral
scent I could ever imagine
was emanating from you…

                I could just hear your voice…

like soft old perfumed hankies,
your concern came through
and you too read
all the way through the lines…

and you didn't let go…

isn't life amazing?
can you see God's plan?
it makes me want to wake up
at 4:44 in the morning and say
"Wow"…

so, soon we shall share lines
and words and thoughts,

                as if watching green buds spring forth

and lines will weave us in
and the weave will keep
us warm…

as we birth a friendship
and don't even feel
the pain.

01.18.01


© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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.............I SO LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!   ( really awesome write Sunshine) -SEA
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2 posted 2001-01-18 07:40 PM


those last lines are a treasure. My goodness, this lifted my spirits this evening and I sure needed it.  Yes, we don't even feel the pain just like you said. Thank you, thank you for this one.

Kathleen


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3 posted 2001-01-18 08:04 PM


SEA...you're so sweet...I adore your responses...thank you!...

Irish...so much beauty to be found in birthing friendships, yes!...hugging you...

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4 posted 2001-01-18 08:10 PM


SUNSHINE..this is amazing!   very beautiful..
yes, the birthing of new friendships is a very cool thing...!  

hugs, g


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5 posted 2001-01-18 08:21 PM


KarileaSpirit~

'and lines will weave us in
and the weave will keep
us warm…

as we birth a friendship
and don't even feel
the pain'


What a wonderful thought, my sweet friend.
The whole poem has wrapped itself around my heart.
I've printed you - and framed you in vitreous silver.
What a marvelous gift is your friendship
that comes wrapped in your poetry.

I love ya', gal !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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6 posted 2001-01-18 09:08 PM


Very lovely, Karilea! Love it!

Denise

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7 posted 2001-01-18 09:25 PM


Karilia..you know I'm smiling big here and sending a great big old hug your way...over the mountains and across the rivers...and I don't even feel the pain...You are something else, you are!!!!
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8 posted 2001-01-18 09:27 PM


thought it was me - but i don't wear florals (jes kidding) - this is excellent - I believe she'll love it - I'm happy for you both - new friendships are a treasure
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9 posted 2001-01-18 09:45 PM


dg...amazing miracles are all around...thank you for reading!...

Margie...[and the wanna-be poet stops here, trying to think of words she can't think of because they engulf more than a thank-you..., then says] Margie...

denise, love you too...!...

Martie...ditto!...

Mr. Yeats....be happy for all of us...you know her well!...

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10 posted 2001-01-18 11:43 PM


What a loving poem. And so creatively made.
Incredible.
Sandra

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11 posted 2001-01-19 12:15 PM


Wow!  Captivating!  There's a touch of class in your "Touch of Glass"

Sorry to corrupt the title, but I couldn't help myself.  It flowed so well with my phrase.

This is really lovely and I liked to way you wove in the looking glass and Alice.  Really lends the mysterious and fantasy to this dream-like piece.

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12 posted 2001-01-19 12:36 PM


I love this, and the way you write always--a wonderously woven piece.

Poeminister

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O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
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13 posted 2001-01-19 08:08 AM


so, soon we shall share lines
and words and thoughts,

                as if watching green buds spring forth

and lines will weave us in
and the weave will keep
us warm…
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

It's hard to choose a favorite line in this one. It's all good.
I will have to save this in my favorites.
Love it!
Deb

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14 posted 2001-01-19 08:58 AM


Cat...thanks for the creativity....

Virginia, interesting, some time back I wrote "A Touch of Class"....I'll have to dig it out and repost it someday...thank you for reading!...

Kevin, thank you!...

Deb, the words you pulled suit me too!  Thank you!

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15 posted 2001-01-19 01:10 PM


Oh my friend...I hate to single out any of your poetry, but I've got to admit, I think this is my favorite to date. The writing here is unmatched and exquisite.
Oh, isn't it amazing how friendship is born without pain, without tears and often without our even realizing it until it's growing strong.
I do hope this poem is one you wil send out to a publisher. I can see it in print as clear as I'm reading it here.
Hugs  
Ruth

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16 posted 2001-01-19 08:35 PM


Internet friends, a la Passions?

Denise

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17 posted 2001-01-19 10:24 PM


Ruth my friend...I too liked the line of birthing friendships...and I shall keep in mind that this would be one to someday publish...times and circumstances change so fast...I am sure it will be outdated by next week!...thank you for reading...

denise...no one can pull the wool over your eyes...thank you for reading this one too!...


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18 posted 2001-01-19 10:32 PM


What an enchanting piece Karilea! My oh my, it flowed so beautifully. Mystical, magical and yet wrapped around a vivid and sweet reality ... excellent my friend!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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19 posted 2001-01-22 11:11 AM


Kit, thank you my dear, for your kind comments....I think this one shall be very special for years to come....
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