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Once Doubted Forever Scarred?
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Once Doubted Forever Scarred? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Well, don't laugh at a free verse addict trying to rhyme. This is the rhythm in which my thoughts are coming out lately, and who am I to ignore an honorable call? Believe it or not, I have several rhymes from recently quietly put away in a notebook. There are things I once believed in, I'd say it surely true, That love knew no boundaries, Until my eyes met you. You tease and taunt my insides, Tearing apart my mind, I'd never know where too look, For pieces left behind. Here I am just breathing you, Sending you on your way, When I'm still reading through, What the laws of true love say. While young in this endeavor, I'd certainly say its true, I'm old enough to realize, My love once favored you. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Love this  -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
From one Free Verse addict to another. . . maybe we do need to have a "rhythm" to our lives. . . and if we do, why is it so hard to find?? Wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Temptress~ This is WONDERFUL ! Don't keep them in a notebook - SHARE !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
TEMPTRESS, I ditto what Marge says above it's "WONDERFUL and SHARE WHAT YOU GOT IN YOUR BINDER OVER THERE"... I found this a delightful read... ~coco~ |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
very nice indeed. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Jenn's a CLOSET RHYMER..!!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Jenn, Hi, I'm reading and gaining so much from these pages, still, even though I'm not writing! Guess it's hard to leave here. Your poem is beautiful......scars can serve a purpose also! Lovely. "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've got to ditto Marge, here. *S* (And ROFL @ Nan *G*) This is great! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Great piece! That's one thing I've noticed about this place, rhyme is more acceptable here than any other forum I've entered. Rather amazing. That's all I used to do, now I do more free verse, I think. One thing I do notice, the poems I compose in my mind while on my, supposed to be daily walk, my poems rhyme and hold a heavy pedantic rhythm. Must be in time with my steps. ;o} sometimes pounding out my message, methinks, or perhaps the message to me from what surfaces to my consciousness. Enjoyed your poem and your confessions from the 'closet.' |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Okay, how rude of me. I never responded to tell anyone thank you. So, let me do it now. I appreciate all of your support. Rhyme is most of the time, difficult for me to do or at least stay with through the whole poem. Nanners...Geesh..don't say that too loud! People might start to expect this kind of stuff from me!  Seriously, coming from you, Nan, that is a compliment. Thanks again everyone. |
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