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Ride the Wind
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Ride the Wind |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Ride the wind she said And tame the stars for me So I looked inside her head And saw only she, could set her free But I rode the wind for her I rode it fast and long And I tamed the stars to offer All these and a lovers song Catch the clouds she said And bind up all the rain You can take me to your bed And hold back all my pain Though, I knew it could not be I chased the clouds for her In the hope, she would be free In a morning filled with myrrh The rain, who could it bind So, I caught it in a pail And I brought it into mind As she began to weep and wail Fly as spark said she Make a lantern with the sky Light up the night for me Show me passion lift me high Then I climbed the awesome heights To paint the sky with love And I prayed that with love lights This deed would be enough But her face withdrew from me Couldn't see the healing hand So I gently set her free Left her to her own command She cries at night I hear For the wind and stars and sky And desire burns off tears, from an angel that can't fly. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Keth this is such an awesome piece my friend....((sigh)) wonderful write indeed  Loved it hon ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry love, Outstandingly beautiful, absolutely stunning love. This is truly awesome, it really is you at your best. (And don't you think that even a poem as stunning as this one with let you off love!) Utterly wonderful dear heart Take care love Slushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Tracie and Marsha, always there with a kind word. Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed! Tracie thanks for the awesome! I needed that. be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This deserves a WOW at the very least. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kethry~ this is gorgeous!! I love how you did this.....one of those " I wish I wrote this" kinda poems -SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ride the wind she said And tame the stars for me So I looked inside her head And saw only she, could set her free =============== But her face withdrew from me Couldn't see the healing hand So I gently set her free Left her to her own command She cries at night I hear For the wind and stars and sky And desire burns off tears, from an angel that can't fly. ======================== Keth this is AWESOME.... your writing is blowing me away of late ... your reaching for some stars of your own my dear ... the use of metaphor and imagery in this is superb the elements of nature to express the emotions is way cool "And saw only she, could set her free" wisdom kissed rhyme ... VERY COOL write me girlie...VERY When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful, if I may say so. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey little one....I'm smiling here.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She cries at night I hear For the wind and stars and sky And desire burns off tears, from an angel that can't fly. ================= forgot to put this in me library ... and forgot to say on me last reply how awesome that last verse is ... for sure,-- wish I had wrote that one "And desire burns off tears," WOW!!!!!!! When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent Kethry. . . I love this one. . . great job!! ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow* kethry what a fabulous piece have you penned here. excellent done my friend ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Kethry This is wonderful, just know catching up and thank you so much for your good thoughts... take care!!! Kathleen |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, this was a wayward muse that caught up with me when I was supposed to be catching up on notes, so I just scribbled it down and posted it. It meant something to me at the time but I'm not sure what! EagleOne, when I can write with the ease you do I won't have to worry about what people think,until then thank you for the Wow! Sea, it's not an acrostic, but it's close to a crossword in that it's cryptic. Thanks! JanetMarie, thanks is such an insufficent word for two awesomes but it's the only one I have, Thanks! Temptress, That you should stop by and honor me is praise indeed.Thank you! Sunshine, I'm following in the master's footsteps...yours. Thank you Sven, that the master of poetry should consider my work to be excellent is high praise. Thanks. Charisma,from one writer to another...you help me shine Thank you.Kathleen, thank you for your encouragement. I wrote Return to innocence with you in mind. Check it out and let me know what you think. Be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Kethry~ This is gorgeous, magical and so loving with a great flow. I'm very impressed The ending is so sorrowful, yet so beautiful.Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Melissa, thanks! Anything you think is good must be magical indeed. be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This was to put it mildly.........FANTASTIC!!!!!!!! I love it when you let yourself go and pour out the emotions in one of your writes. This is by far my favorite of yours and in saying so it by no means diminishes any of the others. This one is just so AWESOME from the get go and then wrapped up in a final verse that is no less than perfect. Library for sure. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mark, you are too kind. This was a rampant muse and something a little different for me, I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you! be well Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* you always write the most incredibly emotional poems. This one had tears gathering in the eyes. Beautiful and heartfelt. BRAVO!!!!Much love and hugs from me to you. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://www.voy.com/7622/ http://www.powerpoems.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Startime, thank you for your generous response. be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is wonderful, Kethry... the last verse is just the crowning gem in a glittering masterpiece... Beautiful! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Kethry love...this is outstanding darlin...just a superb piece of writing..so vivid I can just SEE We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
suthern, thanks for the high praise. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks especially for the crowning gem in a glittering masterpiece. Can I borrow those words?  Paul, that you could SEE is wondrous indeed. Thanks be well, you're swell Keth. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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