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The Realization of the Dream
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The Realization of the Dream |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
In the still of night I hear your scream The silence is shattered By a frightening dream Could it be real Or just in my mind Maybe it’s the ghost Of things left behind I lie there in a cold sweat Heart pounding in my ears Like a bass drum Boom! Boom! Boom! My breathing is short Continuing on Shallow yet deep My pulse races I feel many things On this night Fear Loneliness Anger Anxiety Heartache Pain None of them happy Thoughts of wishes Or rainbows leading on To the tomorrow That looms just ahead Of the roadblock Why is it so hard to see On some days Yet on others It is plain as day Beckoning to me To move ahead Dancing in the garden Where dreams one day Become my reality Where contentment Resides among the roses Despite their thorns Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like this one LW. . . I like the images. . . Well done. . .  ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LW~ I felt an ache in my heart while reading this........hugs to you -SEA |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Fear Loneliness Anger Anxiety Heartache Pain NO you will feel none of these things! signature--> Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wow. Vivid images. Painful, but very well written. I enjoyed it. feel better soon. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Why is it so hard to see On some days Yet on others It is plain as day Beckoning to me To move ahead' Great write, LW! I like this! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Sweetie, this is poignantly lovely - 'Where contentment Resides among the roses Despite their thorns' I like much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dancing in the garden Where dreams one day Become my reality Where contentment Resides among the roses Despite their thorns This piece is truly an excellent read and write and the above stanza my fav...it says so much ~HUG~ my friend Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven . . . Thank you, I did too. They just seem to fit. SEA . . . I know that ache well, but it is through writing that it subsides. Hugs back. Irish Rose . . . Thank you, but I liked it better before the edit. Dawn Eclipse . . . I hope I do too. Thank you. By the way, love the signature. RENT was awesome!! snowpants . . . Happy you enjoyed. Just getting out some feelings. Marge . . . Thanks much to you. Tracie . . . That is my fav stanza too. Thank you so much my friend. ~HUG~ Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
LW, this is an incrediblly inspiring write sweetie... In matters of heart one may sometimes be weakened and not see the existance of a new path full of blossoms... Yet to take those first few steps is the most difficult action to do, but in due time we eventually make those steps... Gosh darn I can relate to your poem... *~coco~* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful heartfelt piece my friend..love it. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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