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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-01-17 09:56 AM


Born Mystery

the wind whispered a haunting name
and he wrestled privately with his
need versus his desire ~ no game
                seek the fair, seek the fair

the sun shone longingly on her face
with all things going for her ~ she tried
but she wondered why she cried
                he is there, he is there

both at the end of their odds
oddly enough they were convinced
this was all there would be
                God does not play games you see

to not ever look (but find)
to not ever seek (but see)
both unwinding in versatility
                 there is a way, there is a way

she wasn’t looking
he wasn’t looking
both were choking
                 hear the wind, see the sun

when then the tornado came
she heard him on the wind
he saw her in the sun
                 each of you shall find the one

and a mystery was born

01.17.01

© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-17 10:03 AM


the wind whispered a haunting name
and he wrestled privately with his
need versus his desire ~ no game
                seek the fair, seek the fair

the sun shone longingly on her face
with all things going for her ~ she tried
but she wondered why she cried
                he is there, he is there
====================
she wasn’t looking
he wasn’t looking
both were choking
                 hear the wind, see the sun

when then the tornado came
she heard him on the wind
he saw her in the sun
                 each of you shall find the one

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VERY VERY COOL WRITE
love the format of this... and the style
but most of all the longing and the emotions expressed
mystic and way cool Sun ... and in me library



When to the sessions of sweet silent thought,
I summon up remembrance of things past ...
I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought.
~Shakespeare~

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2 posted 2001-01-17 11:33 AM


JM...what can I say....you always nail 'em...

thank you!

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3 posted 2001-01-17 11:44 AM


Kari love, this is outstanding, constantly you soar higher and higher. I kneel in admiration at the feet of the queen of poetic delight. Do I love this one, yes it is, absolutely fabulous. Into the library of course, but also on the wall at work. Utterly wonderful.
Take care love
               Majestic Marsha

Exit Marsha looking for blu tack stage right. You can have a choice you can go in the main hall, where you'll be seen and probably swiped at the first opportunity, or in the canteen. Oh whatever I'll copy you and post you twice.  

            


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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4 posted 2001-01-17 12:06 PM


Marsha dear, just be careful where you place that tack [ouch!]...um, thanks!...LOL...
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5 posted 2001-01-17 12:12 PM


Sunshine~ I think this is one of my favorites from you! Spectacular!!!! ( Whoosh!)   -SEA
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6 posted 2001-01-17 01:37 PM


SEA, thank you for the spec...{~,^}
Wilfred Yeats
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7 posted 2001-01-17 02:30 PM


Perfect - in every way - 'nuff said
Sunshine
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8 posted 2001-01-17 06:02 PM


Mr. Yeats...I can only say...thank you...[but a wow escapes, too...]
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9 posted 2001-01-17 06:06 PM


wow. . . this is amazing. . .

wonderful my friend. . .

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Martie
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10 posted 2001-01-17 08:05 PM


Karilea--You are a wonderful poet...I wish I could write like you....hmmm..maybe when I grow up.
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11 posted 2001-01-17 08:36 PM


"to not ever look (but find)
to not ever seek (but see)
both unwinding in versatility
                 there is a way, there is a way"

Sunshine,
I love this.  There is so much sometimes in letting things happen more serendiptiously--more naturally-- then efforting things into happening always.  Excellently penned.

Poeminister

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~ D.H. Lawrence

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12 posted 2001-01-17 08:49 PM


Sven...on another plane...may be...thank you...

Martie...what can I say?...lol...{~,^}...

Poeminister...I haven't seen "serendipitous" in a long time...for some reason, it comes quite naturally from you....thank you....very much....

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13 posted 2001-01-17 09:59 PM


Sunshine this is exceptionally beatiful, even for you! And its not easy to outdo yourself! This is so mystical, yet hopeful, filled with fantasy and potential.
Love it..
Sandra

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14 posted 2001-01-18 06:53 AM


love the way you did this and the form of it, very cool.....
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15 posted 2001-01-18 12:08 PM


Cat....I'm just trying to keep up with the other poets....but if you think I've outdone myself...I'll put my pen down now [not!]LOL...thank you!

Lana, kind words...thank you!...

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