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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2001-01-16 11:09 PM



Metaphors

Should I tell you my love's a rose
Or how I shall die without yours
Would you love me the less do you suppose
If I didn't or would yours endure

Some poets drop metaphors easily
Nothing is what it seems
I'll use them just when they come to me
Or more often resort to dreams

Then there are similes likening
Your color to nature's seasons
Or your curves to clouds brightening
And I love you for so many reasons

But let’s cut to the chase
Love’s as unexplained now as it ever
We’ve still got the human race
Love continues and will not sever

It’s what binds me to you
Be your eyes blue or green
And we’re bound with glue
The most permanent bond ever seen



Great souls have wills; feeble ones have only wishes.

~ Chinese Proverb ~


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2 posted 2001-01-16 11:37 PM


Love is the glue
the binding of two

Enjoyed your poem, Bill.  

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3 posted 2001-01-17 12:04 PM


Excellent Bill , loved the
super-glued !!!! I have just written two,
one was titled "We Are All Community and the
other was titled "Nothing Becomes Too Far
both were along the similar topic of bonds
Hope

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4 posted 2001-01-17 01:13 AM


Should I tell you my love's a rose
Or how I shall die without yours
Would you love me the less do you suppose
If I didn't or would yours endure

Some poets drop metaphors easily
Nothing is what it seems
I'll use them just when they come to me
Or more often resort to dreams

Then there are similes likening
Your color to nature's seasons
Or your curves to clouds brightening
And I love you for so many reasons
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very cool Bill...nice turn and twist of poetic use of metaphor...
and your rhyme flow is delightful
always a pleasure reading your words of wisdom and poetic grace


When to the sessions of sweet silent thought,
I summon up remembrance of things past ...
I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought.
~Shakespeare~

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5 posted 2001-01-17 01:39 AM


metaphors do not come easily to those who have gone through the gauntlet...

well done, Sir Yeats...

CocoBaci
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6 posted 2001-01-17 01:44 AM


A splendid read I thank you...
*~coco~*

Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2001-01-17 02:25 AM


Whether you use metaphors or not, you ALWAYS write on a level that expresses much feeling and your talent for writing is superb.  This was no exception and you nailed the flow and rhyme directly on the head.
Paula Finn
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8 posted 2001-01-17 03:55 AM


Enchanting write as always...you always touch this womans heart with the softnesa of your love
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9 posted 2001-01-17 04:54 AM


Wonderful approach to the subject and done with such class and depth of heart....well done!!
Wilfred Yeats
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10 posted 2001-01-17 06:21 AM


Everyone - thank you so much for your sincere replies - from my heart - thank you so very much      
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