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Victoria
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0 posted 2001-01-16 06:09 PM


Keats Sonnet

My love flows freely like a babbling brook
winding over banks of your existence
floating like two water lilies' in the night
blazing as a fire near an inglenook
flickering like two flames in a distance
our love is not fickle like a rainbow
it is a steady sapphire bengal light
two hearts rhyming, a rondeau in a book
sometimes flowing over rocks of indifference
twined like morning glory, lilac bright
tangoing while dusty coral winds blow
will you catch me if I fall from your arms?
before melting away like the driven snow
a bubble in a babbling brook of charms


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A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)  






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SEA
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1 posted 2001-01-16 06:41 PM


Victoria~ I don't know Keats' work, is this one of his, or yours? Either way, it's beautiful!   -SEA
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2 posted 2001-01-16 06:45 PM


thanks sea..no keats is the form..i wrote it.  The rhyme scheme is abcabdcabcdede
Glad you enjoyed.. give it a try some time

               ~V~


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3 posted 2001-01-16 06:47 PM


Victoria,
Whom ever wrote this, it is a master piece of writing and I was happy to read it.

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4 posted 2001-01-16 07:07 PM


Indeed you  did justice with his style and your poetic talent....outstanding V....




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5 posted 2001-01-16 09:31 PM


thank you seymour and Lauren..im so glad you like the sonnet..nice to hear from both of you..

              ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



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6 posted 2001-01-16 09:36 PM


Victoria--Lovely Sonnet...beautifully penned.

Poeminister

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7 posted 2001-01-16 09:36 PM


(sigh) Beautiful, lovely sonnet! I loved all the images and voice in here, this piece is a work of art indeed! Excellent work, my friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2001-01-17 03:06 AM


Beautiful sonnet .......  I am still studying them before I attempt one but you have made it more enticing to try by giving such a lovely example.  I applaud you on this one.
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9 posted 2001-01-17 04:29 AM


Enjoyed reading your poem Victoria...James
ethome
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10 posted 2001-01-17 04:46 AM


Wonderful writing.....beautifully crafted!
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love this beautiful piece...very well written....love it and also the form.

excellent
((Charisma))

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12 posted 2001-01-17 05:56 AM


High praise to you - for doing a fantastic job on such a difficult form - I floated in that brook right with you ~S~
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13 posted 2001-01-17 06:09 AM


Victoria,
sonnet supreme, or sonnet surprise
I saw Keats applauding before my eyes.
write on
Keth


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14 posted 2001-01-17 10:43 AM


Poeminister..Nice to hear from you..thank
you for peeking in

Noah..thank you so much..pleased you enjoyed
my sonnet

Mark..i love sonnets..shakespearian, sicilian, terza rima spenserian and italian are some of my favorites.
Most are written in iambic pentameter..10 syllables a line..
i think they help with writers block too..pleased you enjoyed Mark

James..thank you i am happy you enjoyed

ethome..thank you so much..always nice
to hear from you ethome..

Charisma..Thank you hon..i enjoyed writing it

Kethry..thank you so much for that nice compliment..nice to hear from you Kethry..

                     ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



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15 posted 2001-01-17 02:51 PM


Keats is one of my favorites and you have done his style up well....an enchanting read

Pepper
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