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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2001-01-16 04:16 AM


I woke up this morning to
       NOTHING
All the joy I had found now
       NOTHING
A few minutes more one way
or the other and what would
have happened?
       NOTHING
If only he hadnt called me
If only we had said one
less I love you
Then I wouldnt be here with
       NOTHING
Where my heart should be
       NOTHING
To look forward to now
       NOTHING
To ease the ache inside
       NOTHING
Where his love once was
       NOTHING

© Copyright 2001 Paula Finn - All Rights Reserved
tracie66
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1 posted 2001-01-16 04:24 AM


Paula what a heartfelt longing in this, I felt the emptiness of it all and I only hope you get through this with your heart not too battered...~HUGS~ floating you way sweetie
Love Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Agust P
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2 posted 2001-01-16 07:03 AM


I find this is very well done, a great poem, simple but saying very much, thanks AP
Kethry
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3 posted 2001-01-16 07:07 AM


Paula,
there's nothing I could add that would help ease your pain so I'm sending loud hugs instead.


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



JamesMichael
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4 posted 2001-01-16 02:23 PM


Paula I feel your loss...take care...James
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5 posted 2001-01-16 02:26 PM


Paula~ sadly I remember exatly what this feels like.......write it out.....hugs to you...... -SEA
Paula Finn
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6 posted 2001-01-17 03:11 AM


Thank you all for your thoughts hugs and prayers
ma miller
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7 posted 2001-01-17 03:15 AM


hi Paula ... interesting piece here ... i think i'd like to hear it, rather than read it myself ... i'm sure that would put emphasis where it's intended ... nice work and be well ...
ethome
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8 posted 2001-01-17 05:11 AM


Paula this is a unique creative format. What a great way to emphasize the sadness in your heart. The words stick in the reader's mind because of the emptiness of the nothing that fills up the days of the writer....well done!!
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9 posted 2001-01-17 05:30 AM


(((warm hugs)))....heartfelt piece, you describe your feelings quite well.
Hope that you will feel better soon.

Charisma

dgvarner
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10 posted 2001-01-17 11:29 AM


so i dont sound too cliche..i'll leave you with very little words...    

but many hugs..

great write paula..  
g


"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens

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