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What Went Wrong She Did Not Say
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What Went Wrong She Did Not Say |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
WHAT WENT WRONG SHE DID NOT SAY by Richard Maxfield 3-10-99 What went wrong she did not say she took my love and went away she said when I look in your eyes I still see the same wonderful man that was for me I took her for my wife I gave her all I gave my life she said dont beet your self up its not you fault my love for you came to a halt nothing I did she said was wrong to kill the love, we shared for so long for twenty two years we loved and lived for only each other our self we did give I thought forever it would last a love like this could never have passed to two children we gave life me and my lover, me and my wife what went wrong, she did not say she took my love and went away she told me I do not love him, he dont love me I just like his company, can’t you see my heart cries out and is broken by the cheats and the unspoken dreams of tomorrow can never be because of the day she stopped loving me every thing I have I would give the dreams of tomorrow, if I could live what went wrong she did not say she took my love and went away copyright # RM99R4 |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Max, I enjoyed the repetition in this...a sad yet brilliant write! Nathan |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Max, I agree with Nate about the repetition because "What went wrong she did not say she took my love and went away" is such a good phrase and so universal (and so painful). You could have repeated it even more I think. Thanks for the write. Krawdad /:^)== =#== |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A very touching write MAX... *~coco~* |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Thank you my friends for taking the time to read and comment. Love and light, Richard |
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