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Pixydust Junior Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 36 |
Open your ears I need you to hear me Open your mind And try to understand Open you eyes "Please would you look at me" OPen your heart And feel what I feel -Pixydust |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Such a plea you've written here, Pixy....a nice and emotional write! Nathan |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
The universal plea, compactly yet effectively done. I take the minimalist approach often myself. /:^)== =#== |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
Very good writing. I have said these things before myself. I can relate. Love and light, Richard |
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Pixydust Junior Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 36 |
Nathan, A plea it is. I've encountered it several times... thanks for the reply! Krawdad, Thanks again. Sometimes short and sweet is the best way to go.  Richard, Very nice to hear coming from a deeply emotional poet such as yourself.  Nice to hear that others can relate. Smiles Pixydust |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is one I think we all can relate to and very well written -SEA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like this...you've touched on needs we all share. Then the tough part, looking to fulfill that for others, significant, special others. I had really expected the last line to read: And feel what I am. You shook me up and that's likely a good thing. Don't just leave the reader in the same place they were when they came in. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Pixy gal, an emotional longing penned superbly ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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nona Member
since 2000-03-03
Posts 139Fla |
well put...not only do we feel this ourselves but the other person may be felling the same also ? nona |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Short but powerful... I especially love "Please would you look at me!" So many times we don't "see" each other no matter how close we think we look. A heartfelt plea... Love it! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
look at you pix! youre a poet...  i especially like "please would you look at me!" also..often it feels that people might hear if theyd only bother to SEE us..! no one likes to be ignored.. hugs,g "oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens |
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Lynn32 New Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 4 |
Short and sweet! Well said. I hear ya. Me! |
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Pixydust Junior Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 36 |
SEA- Yeah, that's what I like about reading poetry is that I feel I can relate to so much of it and while it also expresses emotions I'm feeling at the present time and am unable to express myself. VAS- I think the end reading "and feel what I am" would be very lovely also, but I'm gonna go ahead and leave what I have. Thanks for the feedback. And yes, listening is definitely a need we all share. Tracie66-Thanks! Nona-You're right. So many times we focus on our own needs and forget to consider that the other person may be going through the same thing. Thanks for the insight. Lynn32-Thanks for reading! Rascalx-True! Very true. Dgvarner-Me...a poet?!!!? Thanks! I do love trying! Never knew it could be so much fun and healthy too (emotionally and all )You're the best! Thanks for taking the time! love ya, Pixydust |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I hear ya!!!!!!! Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PixyDust~ These thoughts are expressed so well. Nicely portrayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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