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Angel
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0 posted 2001-01-15 04:35 PM


Don't be too rough, first attempt at double acrostic.

Romeo, Romeo, where is my Romeo
Ender of happiness, bringer of pain
Just when I found love, there was truth
Empty heart, empty soul owned by you
Cringing, I've always been full of fear
Tearing out my already too weak heart
In vein, in order to find more believers

PS. Not a true story
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"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
~Cinderella




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Poeminister
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1 posted 2001-01-15 04:40 PM


Definitly does...and I applaud you on a very well done acrostic--enjoyed the read.

Poeminister



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Angel
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2 posted 2001-01-15 08:42 PM


Poeminister,

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I think I'll give this acrostic thing another shot.

~Susie


"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
~Cinderella



Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
3 posted 2001-01-16 12:45 PM


Nice accoustic...lovely read!

Nathan

Ethan Halo
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on the roof again
4 posted 2001-01-16 03:24 AM


i didn't know what an acrostic was...(more of a street poet than a scholarly one i guess...) but i do now. and i must compliment you, very hip and clever. very well done.

it does hurt, too.

You don't hear much about guys who take their shot and miss...

Angel
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since 1999-07-02
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5 posted 2001-01-16 08:24 PM


Nate Dogg,
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Ethan_Halo,
I only know thanks to Nan and all the other wonderfully potectic people around here  . Thanks, definitely not the best thing I've written, but at least I can say I did it.

~Susie


"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
~Cinderella



Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2001-01-17 03:10 AM


Wonderful double acrostic and I can't wait for your next one.  Be warned though, they can be as addicting as Haiku's and Senyru's.  You will find yourself writing them left and right real soon but that isn't a bad thing anyway.  I enjoyed it very much.
Angel
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since 1999-07-02
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7 posted 2001-01-17 09:50 PM


Mark,

Glad you liked it but don't count on me getting addicted to them anytime soon  . They are just about impossible for me. I'm not too sure where this one even came from.

Thanks for Reading,
~Susie


"Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are call

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