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ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
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0 posted 2001-01-15 11:08 AM


none so rare as deathbed words


none so rare as deathbed words
slip into ears from a whispering breath
as i lay alone in my wardrobed clothes
but from your voice a spark does glow
igniting passions before my leave

tell me of our past and what we were
were we as heroes deep in the fight
or just folk of everyday plain(?)
were we as gallant in our blazing paths
or just we in our everywe world(?)

hush of our children and their's again
gather them around close to hear
the story of who's blood flows
through veins of us and us past
and how we spilt scarlet fresh

of all these things i wish said
and of things remembered upon this bed
of living and love, of sleep and death
i want most to come from your lips
something of you, i never knew


m.a. miller
01.11.01


© Copyright 2001 ma miller - All Rights Reserved
dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
1 posted 2001-01-15 11:27 AM


very neat..i like..  

hugs, g

"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens

ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

2 posted 2001-01-16 11:51 AM


thanks for reading g.
angelswing
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 705
United Kingdom
3 posted 2001-01-16 12:10 PM


Wow, enjoyed it .g ... Sorry only kidding, thought I'd follow suit though . Really liked the flow of the mid-section of each stanza .
Thanks alot .
L.of.L. Tom .


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -

Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

4 posted 2001-02-24 11:16 AM


enjoyed your poem... nicely written...
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
5 posted 2001-02-27 01:41 AM


Hi Mark...its great seeing you here...Im no good at throwing darts my friend...so I will just say this hit home in more ways than one...
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