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Lament of the Sea
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Lament of the Sea |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Pounding waves on rocky shore, In the distance heathered moor, Sailors quaff their pints of ale, 'Til once again, sail ocean's swale. Longboats tied down at the docks, When comes the call, ship on the rocks, Man the oars mates, pull as one, Men will die, 'fore night is done. Rolling, tossing, drenched with spray, While on the shore, the women pray, A hundred yards, she lies astern, Row my maties, muscles burn. On schooner's deck, a huddled crew, While from the north, a force wind blew, Sails are rent, from norther's gale, Few would live, to tell night's tale. Neptune rises from the waves, Pulls ship and crew to watery graves, A hundred yards, so near, so far, Beneath the sea, sinks schooner's spar. Row my maties, muscles burn, As to the shore, the longboats turn, Rolling, tossing, in the swale, While back on land the widows wail. In the tavern, day is done, Sailors grieve, the sea has won, Quaffing pints of Guiness ale, 'Til once again, sail ocean's swale. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 01-15-2001).] |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
That was just awesome! ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You've done it again, Mike....made me feel like I was there while....wonderful work. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Exceptional write...very descriptive, with clear images...very nicely written. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
As a child of the sea, and one who is now and has always lived in fishing villages, I must tell you that this is magnificent!! It portrays the sailor's life expertly, and is a great pleasure to read!!  Write on! -<--<--{(@ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enchantress...thanks for the wonderful. Elizabeth...thank ya kindly, glad you enjoyed. Poeminister...appreciate the comment and the gracious reply. Sunny...thank you muchly. I am afraid my total experience with the sea is a tourist ride to Catalina... not many oceans here in Kansas...*smile* |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
This is good. It reminds me of The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald by Gordon Lightfoot. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Exactly...Lightfoot's music to Mike's words...wonderful...especially when the imagination wrote the images...well done Your Honor... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ I burned muscle helping them row ! This was action-packed ... stem to stern ! Very vivid, my friend. I'm not gonna say that I almost got seasick !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Mike, I feel drenched, this seemed so real. What a poem! "I walked beside the evening sea and dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I agree with Marge and everyone else....great writing! Nathan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--I have been on a trip to Catalina that was almost this bad...This poem was awesome! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Hope you don't mind me slipping in here to tell you how grand I believe this poem to be. It's not every day I am treated to such a dramatic seafaring tale, especially one as musical as this. (wonderful vocabulary, by the way ~ how often do we find "quaff" and "swale" used so imaginatively?) Be good (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
You are very talented, I really like this, the images captured me |
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