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dgvarner
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0 posted 2001-01-15 01:20 AM



gently she stirs
in the quiet of his voice,
          nearly a whisper

her hair undressed
and pillow-tousled,
she smiles
at the surprise of him

he speaks again
and she reaches out
to touch his lips as they move

but all she hears
          is his voice...

the words mean something
but she cant know what
     just now

for it is his voice
that stirs her heart
          
this morn...

-dgvarner
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"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..."  cat stevens

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 01-16-2001).]

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Poeminister
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1 posted 2001-01-15 01:23 AM


I like.  Beatiful write.  Very nicely penned...

Poeminister

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~ D.H. Lawrence

Sunnyone
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2 posted 2001-01-15 01:27 AM


I have become mesmerized by your style, dg...
it is so clean, so smooth, and so graceful!!


Write on!
-<--<--{(@



Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-01-15 09:49 AM


he speaks again
and she reaches out
to touch his lips as they move

but all she hears
          is his voice...

the words mean something
but she cant know what
     just now

for it is his voice
that stirs her heart
          
this morn...
======================

written like a softly whispered dream ...
very very nice DG
jm

baby can I hold you tonite ...
maybe if I said the right words, at the right time ...
you'd be mine.
baby can I hold you tonite.
~tracy chapman~

dgvarner
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4 posted 2001-01-15 11:19 AM


POEMINISTER..hey thanks! glad you stopped in  

SUNNY..aw shucks..*dg kicks her toe in the dirt and blushes..*   thanks a bunch!  (hey i enjoyed your art on your webpage!!  very cool :

JM..thank you much!  ...hmm..it WAS a bit of a softly whispered dream....  *sigh*..  
btw..i love your tracy quote!  i've got her on my..uh..shh..OTHER identity..lol  

hugs, g


"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens

Mark Bohannan
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5 posted 2001-01-15 11:47 AM


Wonderful write.  Whispers can be very pleasant when accompanied with the right voice and words.  Love this style of write from you.
maxtec1
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6 posted 2001-01-15 11:51 AM


Gee this is such a wonderful write. i love the feelings it left me with. Great writing my friend.
Love and light,
Richard

Parker
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7 posted 2001-01-15 02:18 PM


This is so soft, like a delicate kiss to a dream. I like the way you whisper your kisses.  

Parker

snowpants
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8 posted 2001-01-15 08:36 PM


'gently she stirs
in the quiet of his voice,
          nearly a whisper'

Great title for a great poem!  I love this!  So quiet and passionate!

sp  


I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Pixydust
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9 posted 2001-01-15 11:50 PM


aaahhhh!!!!!!!!
ok...enough of that! Really, i loved this. Wonder who it was about  giggle giggle. You put your thoughts into words so well.
Great work!

Pixydust

Nate Dogg
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10 posted 2001-01-16 12:30 PM


A precisely written piece, D....brilliant work!

Nathan

kcsgrandma
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11 posted 2001-01-16 12:45 PM


You've done it again, Gale.  I'm mesmerized by the way you can put so much into so few words!    Must be a pretty nice voice, eh?

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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12 posted 2001-01-16 12:55 PM


I'm with everyone else, I love it.  

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.



Marge Tindal
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13 posted 2001-01-16 12:55 PM


DG~
I likey, likey, likey !

'her hair undressed
and pillow tousled'


Yep ... likey much !
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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dgvarner
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14 posted 2001-01-16 02:03 AM


COWBOY MARK..thank you much..always good to hear from a cowboy  

thanks RICHARD..glad i could leave you with a great feeling  

PARKER..whispered kisses ..just for you love...  

SNOWPANTS..so glad you loved it..!  

aw PIXY..what do you mean "enough of that"..we're only getting warmed up!     thanks for reading  

NATE DOGG..thanks a bunch friend!  

MAR..that voice..that darned voice!  lol  thanks for your sweet reply  

EAGLE..thanks friend poet..    

thanks so much MARGE!  glad you likey so muchy  

hugs, g


Parker
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15 posted 2001-01-17 12:24 PM


I'm going to hold you to that promise.  

Parker

insect
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16 posted 2001-01-17 01:07 PM


Wonderful write!
I'm mesmerized by your poem

Paula Finn
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17 posted 2001-01-17 01:30 PM


This is truly beautiful...a perfect dream
dgvarner
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18 posted 2001-01-17 04:23 PM


PARKER..just hold me baby..i dont make promises...  

thanks INSECT..glad you enjoyed  

PAULA..dreams are good ..  

hugs, g

doreen peri
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19 posted 2001-01-17 04:26 PM


WOW!
Parker
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20 posted 2001-01-17 04:59 PM


So your saying your looking for a meaningful weekend whispering session.  

Parker

dgvarner
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21 posted 2001-01-17 05:17 PM


hey DOREEN!  thanks for the 'WOW'!  

oh no LOVE PUPPY...   more than that..when its time for promises..i'll let my guard down..would you like to discuss this over a nice star gazing session........??  

hugs, g

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22 posted 2001-01-17 06:06 PM


Geeez, I feel like I'm intruding on you and Parker   lol (too cute)....along with everyone else, I love this   -SEA
Honeybee
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23 posted 2001-01-17 08:13 PM



Such a soft, sweet piece   May whispers be mixed with sighs of love for you...

Take care,
Melissa


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



dgvarner
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24 posted 2001-01-17 08:35 PM


SEA...lol @ you!  cant very well intrude on a public blue page..lol  
thanks for reading SEA..   good to be read..and laughed over..teehee

thanks MELISSA   thats so sweet  

hugs,g

Angel
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25 posted 2001-01-17 10:00 PM


This piece was very sweet. I enjoyed it a lot.

~Susie


Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are calle

dgvarner
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26 posted 2001-01-17 11:02 PM


thanks SUSIE   i'm glad you enjoyed..

hey, i'd like to read the rest of your signature quote..it got cut off..  

Martie
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27 posted 2001-01-17 11:15 PM


Very tender and love-filled...enjoyed!
dragonpoe
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28 posted 2001-01-18 08:36 AM


Very nice. Soft and sensual, elegant. Enjoyed the read much  

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

dgvarner
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29 posted 2001-01-18 07:57 PM


MARTIE & DRAGONPOE..  thanks for your kind replies   and for taking the time to read!  glad you enjoyed  

hugs, g

Sunshine
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30 posted 2001-01-18 08:00 PM


Very enjoyable..thank you!
dgvarner
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31 posted 2001-01-18 08:05 PM


thanks SUNSHINE    glad you enjoyed!

hugs, g

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