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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-01-14 11:52 PM



The thought of you vanishes
like an object in the rear view mirror
and the woeful eye quickly varnishes
all that could bring me near you.
Suddenly, out of nowhere, you’ve become my idol,
and I’ve ceased to worship the man on the cross.
If he really was Him, he would not stay idle,
understanding that I am at such a loss.
The pen crisscrosses the calendar with ardor,
but alas, the time goes farther than
any calendar. It has become so much harder
to look forward to something rather than
to look behind the shoulder, where
a solid white line runs like an endless serpent,
where the mirror reflects your stare,
where I may appear (closer than I am) determined.

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Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
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Regina SK; Canada
1 posted 2001-01-15 12:19 PM


Master--I like the anologies in this...its a thought-provoking piece...nicely written.

Poeminister

"It is our business to go as we are impelled."
~ D.H. Lawrence

Master
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2 posted 2001-01-15 10:27 AM


Thank you Poeminister, I'm glad you liked it!
Master
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3 posted 2001-01-15 03:47 PM


Any comments/suggestions?
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2001-01-15 03:52 PM


I too enjoyed the metaphors.  I can't say that I can relate to this specific weakness but I can turn the meaning onto one of mine very easily.  Wonderful write and cause much to reflect on.
Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA
5 posted 2001-01-15 06:10 PM


Thank you Mark,

I'm glad that you were able to find something in the poem to relate to... That's what makes poetry poetry!... THanks

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