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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-01-14 07:05 AM


Candid Moments Cameraed

what do I miss what do I miss
when I try to capture the bliss
of your face
by camera
what did I miss in that flash?

for I would just want to look
on you
and keep the full of you in view
and never mind the camera's click
when I can hold you to me quick…

so to identify your face
let me take you in my embrace
let me trace the trace of you
and then keep your identity as clue
of what you mean to me

let me see you in the impress of sheet
let me feel you in this touch of neat
then let me see you in shadows dim
let me discard for you the shy and prim
let us know the sweet of complete….

let me trace your lips and brow
and keep you safe in the here and now
and then with palms imprint my hand
upon the deep of your command
of what you mean to me

for in a camera's briefest of click
I know that a smile can disappear that quick
the one that I would put there for you
but not if I loose touch of you
not if I loose much of you

so be my candid moment
be my can did moment
be the camera of my
soul
be the picture I keep whole.

01.13.01



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 01-14-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2001-01-14 08:38 AM


Kari love, this is just supremely superb, utterly divine, and has the flow of melted honey.
And yes I love it as always, because it's always unfailingly beautiful that's why dear heart. Never doubt that you are exceptionally talented. (And Puck always plays the jester to the fairy royalty you know.  )
Take care love
            Majestic Marsha
                    
                         


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Sunnyone
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2 posted 2001-01-14 10:16 AM


Ah......as a native chief once told me....."the camera captures a piece of one's soul, and holds it in place, throughout time"!!  You have done this with your words, my friend, and very well done at that!!  


Write on!
-<--<--{(@



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3 posted 2001-01-14 10:47 AM


Sunshine, there is no camera in existence that can capture what fingers can tracing one's face with love..this is such a beautiful thought for a poem and you have done it wonderfully...
Paula Finn
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4 posted 2001-01-14 10:49 AM


AHH Sunshine...I'd rather see through your eyes than the camera lense anyday darling...this is beautiful
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-01-14 11:12 AM


Karilea,
What the camera sees is view
What the touch reveals is true.
*L* Sy

jwesley
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6 posted 2001-01-14 11:30 AM


The camera freezes, the eye beholds...and your eye beholds what we all want to see...
beautiful...

jwesley

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7 posted 2001-01-14 03:54 PM


Marsha...I think you've given our doreen yet another line..."melted honey"...just think what she could do with that...thank you for reading!...

Sunny1...that indeed was part of my thought of "imagery" in what the true Americans knew we could take, and what we could not take...thank you!...

'Deer...thank you for sharing that thought with all of us...

Paula...be careful what you wish for...LOL...I seem to be saying that a lot lately...but I understand, and thank you!...

Sy...only YOU could have said ALL of that in so few words...thank you...

James, sweet comment, I do so appreciate it, thank you...


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