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Lady Lightning
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0 posted 2001-01-14 12:52 PM


~My Want For You~

My want for you is like no other
Scorching my soul
Binding me
My want for you

I wake each day with thoughts of you
Still there when day is done
Hammering at my heart, all night through
My want for you

Within me it sighs
How my heart cries
Each new moment
My want for you

Aching with despair
And you are where?
Has God forgotten, or maybe he never knew
My want for you




The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown

© Copyright 2001 Joy Lucas - All Rights Reserved
lisad
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1 posted 2001-01-14 01:11 AM


~LL~
Oh my...  Just the right choice of words for the feelings that so many of us have, and are not always able to share... I am sure that there are many others that feel the same way...  The feelings lying deep within the soul just waiting to be brought out by that special someone...  

Love ya  cupts,

lisad

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
2 posted 2001-01-14 01:18 AM


LL..God has not forgotten love.. thats the hard part..trying to figure out the big picture, when you really just want to take a polaroid of the way YOU want it!  LOL

great write..some really good lines in this one  

hugs, g


"a love declared for days to come, is as good as none" -tracy chapman

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-01-14 05:10 AM


LL
Good poem, nice flow, loved the repetition.
write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Marsha
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4 posted 2001-01-14 06:23 AM


LL love, this is soooooo brilliant, an excellant and truthfully fabulous piece, amazing love and quite simply beautiful.
Superb flow and line, (there that's to prove I can do C A)  
Take care love
                 Mushy
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2001-01-14 10:38 AM


So glad you decided to post one finally.  This was a very powerful write and full of emotion.  You pen very well and I look forward to the next one.
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-01-14 10:51 AM


very cool poem girlie...
such intensity...
love the scorching my soul line....
and yes..its great to see your name here..
very well written and expressed LL...
you write the thing we all long for most...
very cool poem indeed
keep em coming
later girlie
me

baby can I hold you tonite ...
maybe if I said the right words, at the right time ...
you'd be mine.
baby can I hold you tonite.
~tracy chapman~

maxtec1
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since 2000-12-09
Posts 577
Garland, Tx
7 posted 2001-01-14 10:54 AM


Gee have I ever felt this way before. I can relate to your penned words. Great writing my friend.
Love and light,
Richard

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
8 posted 2001-01-14 11:32 AM


Me thinks He knows my friend, but allows one to find it in their time...well done.

jwesley

Lady Lightning
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 422
Kentucky
9 posted 2001-01-14 04:51 PM


lisad...Hey girlie..Glad you stopped in ..I'm still waiting for one of yours to show up here ..Better make it soon or you're gonna be in "MUCH" trouble , you know..
SO glad you liked this one, Yes, the feelings lie deep, but someday when least expected they will come out and shine!! This I KNOW you know..   ...Love ya cupts as well..   ~LL~

fallen rain... I know HE hasn't forgotten, he just isn't ready yet to show me , huh?..  
Thanks so much for the sweet words.. Hugs.. ~LL~

Kethry...Thanks for the sweet words..Appreciate you much... ~LL~

Marsha...I knew you would like this...hehe..You are too sweet to me , ya know...Thanks so much and keep flyin high for me, K?      Hugs... ~LL~

Mark...Well, Howdy there cowboy...lol..
Thanks for reading and for your thoughts...I haven't had much of a head for this poetry thing, but me thinks that's about to change...   ..ALways, I appreciate your words of encouragemant.. ~LL~

Janet Marie...You liked the scorching soul line , huh? ...  ...Believe me, it gets kinda hot with the soul burning, ya know?..LOL..Anyways, you know me loves it when you stop in with your sweet words...Thanks , you know the rest..   Hugs.. ~LL~

Richard...You know I wish you didn't relate to my stuff so well, but seems like I do yours too, huh?..     Thanks so much my friend for stopping in and leaving your sweet words...     Hugs.. ~LL~

Jimmy...Me knows HE knows...  ..And I will find it in my own time...Thanks so much for the read, I really do appreciate it.. Hugs.. ~LL~
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The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost.  author unknown

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SEA
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with you
10 posted 2001-01-14 05:04 PM


LL~ you wrote of this ache perfectly.......the ending grabbed my heart.....loved this   -SEA
spiked
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Hammond, La USA
11 posted 2001-01-14 11:02 PM


LL very nice write, echoes with dispair.
Rich

Lady Lightning
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12 posted 2001-01-15 03:20 PM


SEA...Hey girl...Glad to see ya here..  
Thanks so much for the sweet words, you know I love it when you come read my work...   Thanks again.. Hugs   ~LL~

spiked...Thanks so much for reading my work and replying...Means alot..I'm glad you seen something in this , but did it have to be despair...LOL..Just kiddin', it's there of course in the write, but not in real life..   Thanks again...Hugs  ~LL~

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The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost.  author unknown

[This message has been edited by Lady Lightning (edited 01-15-2001).]

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
13 posted 2001-01-15 03:37 PM


*sigh*
this just leaves me nodding...

very well said!
Snow

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
14 posted 2001-01-15 06:32 PM


Oh how I can relate..You said this very well.
Sandra

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada
15 posted 2001-01-15 06:42 PM


Nicely penned...can feel the ache in your words...hoping that this person comes to you soon.  

take care,
Poeminister

"It is our business to go as we are impelled."
~ D.H. Lawrence

Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
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Georgia, Fulton
16 posted 2001-01-16 12:48 PM


I can definitely relate to this, Lightning....a wonderful write!

Nathan

Lady Lightning
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 422
Kentucky
17 posted 2001-01-16 04:03 PM


Snow....Thank you so much for the nod...  
Glad you liked this and I appreciate you reading my work... Hugs  ~LL~

catalinamoon...How very nice to see you here..Thank you so much for the sweet words, although I wish you didn't feel this,it does seem to be the way here lately.. Hugs  ~LL~

Poeminister...Thank you for stopping and reading my work...I appreciate it much..And  it's not such an ache anymore, he has filled it... Hugs   ~LL~

Nate Dogg...Oh my , how I wish you couldn't relate...Thanks for the kind words.. and remember EMINEM rocks!!! lol.. Hugs  ~LL~

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The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost.  author unknown

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