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Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 2001-01-13 03:20 AM

with startled voices
the seagulls cry me awake
from this dream of you.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2001-01-13 04:49 AM

Well done Beki,
Nobody does Senyru like you do senyru!
write on
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2001-01-13 09:40 AM

Kethry's right..

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

3 posted 2001-01-14 02:41 PM

thanks, I appreciate the compliment

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

4 posted 2001-01-14 02:47 PM

I like this. Lovely Senryu.

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

Beckalini
Member

since 2001-01-02

Posts 151
Yorkshire, England

5 posted 2001-01-14 02:49 PM

Wow! I wish i could do this! It has so much impact in so few words. Brilliant stuff Beki, I hope you're chuffed with yourself! I know i would be

~Becky~

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

6 posted 2001-01-15 12:26 PM

never heard the word "chuffed" but I am pleased with it. thanks for reading, all

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-01-15 01:24 AM

Those sea gulls can be so intrusive...yet on the wing or at quiet rest they a marvelous creatures. It touches me so when I seem them in a coastal sky or when I splash them into a painting or drawing. I'm guilty of feeding them at river parks, too.

Enjoyed your poem and the voyage on which it took me.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-01-15 01:43 AM

liked it too...such a heart-warming image

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

9 posted 2001-01-15 02:56 AM

again, thanks VAS and Kaile

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