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Victoria
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0 posted 2001-01-13 12:46 PM


Have I ever told you how much I love you?
can you see the faithfulness of my eye's?
can you feel  in the softness of my kiss?
can you hear in the passion of my sigh's?

There is no way you could ever know
what I feel in the seclusion of my heart
how much you have touched my life
love created like a medley, not apart

You are the music within my being
the opus in the orchestra of the night
our love is a fine sculpture of art
It is created in Devine vigil light

Love flow's within the salt of my tear's
created within music of the sphere's



A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-01-13 12:57 PM


There is no way you could ever know
what I feel in the seclusion of my heart
how much you have touched my life
love created like a medley, not apart

You are the music within my being
the opus in the orchestra of the night
our love is a fine sculpture of art
It is created in Devine vigil light

Love flow's within the salt of my tear's
created within music of the sphere's
==================
beautiful Victoria ...
a  lovely sincere dedication of heart
read like a song...had a melody dancing in the rhyme
take care
jm

No one ever told me ... I could get lost while standing still ...
and sorrow doesnt make a sound ... as it takes away all your will.


maxtec1
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2 posted 2001-01-13 01:02 AM


Wonderful writing. I loved the feelings it left me with.
Love and light,
Richard

Victoria
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3 posted 2001-01-13 08:56 AM


thank you janet marie and rich..I appreciate your commments..nice to hear from you..

                     ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



vandana
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4 posted 2001-01-13 12:32 PM


nice poem
Victoria
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5 posted 2001-01-13 04:25 PM


thank you vandana..nice to hear from you

                    ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



JamesMichael
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6 posted 2001-01-13 04:27 PM


Victoria you just told me right now...James
Victoria
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7 posted 2001-01-13 05:41 PM


thank you darling james

                ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



catalinamoon
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8 posted 2001-01-13 09:42 PM


Ah, if only they could really see..You have said it perfectly, as always.
Sandra

Victoria
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9 posted 2001-01-13 11:00 PM


thank you hon..always nice to hear from you..HUGS

                  ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



tracie66
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10 posted 2001-01-13 11:02 PM


Oh Victoria what a tender render of heart...well penned hon
~HUG~
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



CocoBaci
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11 posted 2001-01-14 12:35 PM


Such melody from within thy heart expressed so eloquently in the poetry you write...
I thank you for this enjoyable read...
*~coco~*

Victoria
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12 posted 2001-01-14 10:17 AM


thank you Coco and Tracie..i appreciate your kind words..and for peeking in.HUGS

              ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



Sunnyone
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13 posted 2001-01-14 10:26 AM


'...love created like a medley...'
as is this beautiful work of art, my friend.
I do so enjoy reading your writings!!  


Write on!
-<--<--{(@



Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
14 posted 2001-01-14 10:32 AM


Very beautiful my friend.  It is so nice when you pen one of yours straight from the heart.  It is easy to see the strength of your love in your writing.
Victoria
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15 posted 2001-01-14 12:05 PM


Thank you Sunny...and i am always happy to hear from you sweet lady..HUGS..

Thank you so much Mark..i am always pleased to see your responses...hope your weekend is going great. HUGS

               ~V~


A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)



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