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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2001-01-12 09:25 PM





He offered it up to me
‘hardly driven’
so he claimed
Shining there in the lot
It beckoned me
“sit here! Slide in!”

So I took it out
It purred a perfect
Melody to my heart
And because I needed it
I couldn’t hear the
‘clink clink bang’
in the engine

I took it home
Loved it, used it
Tended it like a jewel
And listened to it’s
Humming song

And then one night
I heard it
The clink
The clink and bang
And wondered?
What had I done?

How was this noise
Allowed to happen
What had I done?
Why had I not heard
The change in the sound
From the hum
To the
Clink

And the mechanic said
‘it’s not your fault
it was sold to you this way’
How could the salesman
Do this this?
With a straight face
A lie? Outright?
He used my naivete
My tender heart
My joy
And sold me
A lemon

A lesson learned?
Heartache earned?
Listen with more
Than your heart
Listen with
Your mind
And never
Trust
A used car
salesman


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Denise
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1 posted 2001-01-12 09:31 PM


I've had a lemon or two in my day...and not only cars.....LOL.....Great poem, Sharon!!

Denise

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2 posted 2001-01-12 09:34 PM


OMG...she got my car from 1982...I'm sorry!!!!
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3 posted 2001-01-12 10:02 PM


lol!!  A light-hearted refreshing poem!  Nicely done and I could relate well!  

--Artistic--

"Dreams are the touchstones of our characters"
-Henry David Thoreau



Agust P
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4 posted 2001-01-13 11:45 AM


liked this one, honest and open, thanks AP
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5 posted 2001-01-13 11:56 AM


Great piece, you've made lemonade from your lemon.  btw, lemons come brand new, too!  And it's often 'ordinary maintenance' until the warranty's up. ;o}
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6 posted 2001-01-13 07:38 PM


no doubt!!!  LOL  

great one deVine. . . we've all been there I'm sure. . .

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7 posted 2001-01-13 07:41 PM


Didn't you know they sugar up a lemon to make it sweet? Loved the poem. Sy
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8 posted 2001-01-13 08:30 PM


I agree with Denise....
cars aren't the only things that are lemons in disguise!!  Great poem, and great lesson most of us learn the hard way!!  


Write on!
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9 posted 2001-01-13 08:36 PM


Ah, but lessons learned the hard way are never easily forgotten ... loved your theme in this Sharon, very nicely done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Jamie
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10 posted 2001-01-13 09:06 PM


I feel like Gilligan---what did i say? what did I say?...lol---- (little known fact-- it was never used but Gilligans first name would have been Willie had they chosen to use it)--just a little FYI.....


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Mr.Magoo
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11 posted 2001-01-27 12:54 PM


I strongly agree with you on this.
My wife had the same thing happen to her not to long ago.
I`ve found that if your looking for a used car from a car lot your best bet is to go to a dealer that sales NEW CARS and look at the trade-ins they have.
Most of the trade-ins have paper work from the last owner,so you can call them and ask about the car.
Also NEVER BUY A USED CAR WITHOUT TAKING IT TO A SHOP FIRST.
Sorry to ramble on.
Your poem was well written and full of info.
Very Nice.
                      Mr.Magoo

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12 posted 2001-01-27 01:08 PM


You can trust that they always seem to have a few lemons and they are looking for a trusting soul that will believe anything they say....James
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13 posted 2001-01-29 02:12 PM


ROFLMAO... I love this, PDV!!!

Picture me on the 2nd day of owning my car... pulled into a parking place, ran my lunchtime errands. Start to return to work... the thing won't go in reverse... Back into the nearest store to call my boss and explain that IF the person in front of me ever cleared a path, I was on my way to the dealership! By the time I got there, I couldn't decide whether to cry, scream, or curse... had to settle for doing all three simultaneously and loudly. *G* (And they didn't even have a computer for me to play on... the nerve! LOL)

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